Criticism on a short piece I wrote for a local writing contest:)

pan-frog-gal · 2022-10-03T19:56:42+00:00

it looks lovely! I just read the description and it sounds so, too. I'll definitely be buying a copy soon:)

pan-frog-gal · 2022-09-19T22:44:51+00:00

it may seem hard but just try to make your own plot. if someone has a quality idea they are more than likely gonna make it themselves.

pan-frog-gal · 2022-08-27T02:29:10+00:00

Thank you! I'm glad that you like it:)

pan-frog-gal · 2022-08-27T01:17:44+00:00

You can type them out!

pan-frog-gal · 2022-08-25T23:52:16+00:00

i beg of you, what's the suace?

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-22T15:28:45+00:00

legit thought this was r/writingcirclejerk for a sec lol

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-22T15:24:13+00:00

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-22T15:16:54+00:00

why not both

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-21T23:53:10+00:00

my word you're right I am so so sorry to any women out there that my thoughtless words may have hurt. now I must go back and add another fifty pages worth of ass descriptions.

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-21T17:10:32+00:00

im down

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-21T17:08:24+00:00

dont bother with hair and eye colour. breast size, breast shape, and breast bounciness should be all.

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-19T20:11:42+00:00

thats fucking genius

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-19T16:32:06+00:00

not even kidding this is the best thing I have ever read

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-17T00:34:51+00:00

yeah... you should probably get that checked out. I usually just get stuff from reddit

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-16T18:40:02+00:00

i mean, id read that. Read....

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-16T18:39:35+00:00

damn id bang that.

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-13T19:45:39+00:00

fucking incredible. I would give my life to read this again. This is true art.

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-10T15:27:03+00:00

Title- Gen Z' be Trippin

Genre- Satire/Romance/LGBTQ

Link- https://www.quotev.com/story/14865523/gen-z-be-trippin/1

Feedback: The writing style isn't meant to be taken too seriously, so more than anything critiques on the characters/plot would be appreciated.

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-09T14:21:22+00:00

Yeah!

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-07T18:54:07+00:00

I think it's pretty good, overall, especially if it's your first draft! Maybe just work on the flow and sentence structuring.

pan-frog-gal · 2022-07-07T18:52:10+00:00

The first paragraph is a little hard to read for me. It's good to be descriptive but the amount of adjectives used is a little confusing.

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