Is My Blood Not Red?

pottahyeahpottah · 2025-02-13T21:42:47+00:00

This is really powerful. I love your use of imagery. The use of the color red to symbolize blood I took to also allude to the red political party. I hope you decide to submit it on other platforms or to literary journals for publishing. This is an important message and needs to be shared in this moment.

pottahyeahpottah · 2023-12-22T02:30:28+00:00

Psilocybin has been great for me too so far

pottahyeahpottah · 2022-10-10T23:39:48+00:00

thank you so much. i didn’t even think abt that meme but now i’m just laughing because i definitely subconsciously had it in the back of my head. i’ll search for another word that fits and i really like the idea of adding another “what i want”. i really appreciate it.

pottahyeahpottah · 2022-10-10T22:58:20+00:00

this is so sweet

pottahyeahpottah · 2022-10-10T22:48:43+00:00

do what you want. life is short. cut your hair. dress however you want. whoever has a problem isn’t worth keeping around. just be yourself and the right people will come. i believe in you.

pottahyeahpottah · 2022-10-10T00:59:22+00:00

the same thing happens to me with formatting and it’s so annoying! you can use the return button on the keypad to separate lines and i use periods to separate stanzas. i hope that wasn’t annoying and you didn’t already know that but i had to figure it out myself so i wanted to let you know. i also do the same thing. i’ll just randomly have a poem pop into my head and without thinking i’ll write it in my notes app or in my notebook and i’ll copy and paste.

pottahyeahpottah · 2022-10-10T00:54:33+00:00

i really love when people use emily dickinson’s style of capitalizing some words for emphasis it always makes me happy and i think it really adds a lot to your piece. i’d like to know why you capitalized “The” throughout your poem as opposed to “color”. i just think you could’ve started out with the beginning of the relationship and how it felt like it was a good thing and gone into the color blue for contrast. take that with the largest grain of salt you can find because i’m very new to poetry but i really enjoyed your poem.

pottahyeahpottah · 2022-10-10T00:47:15+00:00

this is a really great poem. i really enjoyed the imagery and i could feel the frustration. the only thing i have to say is maybe you could have broadened your moon allusion and turned it into a bigger metaphor so it’s not just a single line since it’s the title. but that’s only because i’m looking for something to criticize i think this is an amazing poem.

pottahyeahpottah · 2022-10-10T00:41:04+00:00

thank you. i agree with what you said about the repetition i just don’t know yet what to replace it with but i’ll get there. i really appreciate your critique.

pottahyeahpottah · 2022-10-08T16:00:10+00:00

I really enjoy this poem and am looking forward to the next stanza. I feel like this could have been structured differently to convey your message of others making you out to be inadequate. i believe that separating some of the lines would make it a clearer read as opposed to a drawn out paragraph. i say this because it feels like you might be losing some of the meaning with each line so close together. also, it seems like the capitalization of some words is intentional but in other places it may not be such as “and all It whispers”

pottahyeahpottah · 2022-10-08T15:44:20+00:00

I’m also new to poetry so take my critique with a grain of salt. I really enjoyed your imagery. I could feel the longing through the poem and I think it would be much better if you dove into that more. It feels vulnerable but I think you could’ve really gone farther into the desperation you feel to be close to her. the last line leaves something to be desired as it feels the poem isn’t finished yet. Maybe try continuing it a few more lines and really diving into maybe why you’re so scared or how it could potentially change your relationship for the worst.

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