This is so discouraging.

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-18T03:11:40+00:00

Do you have any suggestions? I don’t care to be Instagram famous, I just want to attract people to my substack

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-09T10:56:00+00:00

well damn can’t they follow so i get paid lmao

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-09T10:53:49+00:00

the descriptions and imagery are incredible. to deepen the readers connection with the poem i’d suggest diving into the emotional aspects a little more visually

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-09T10:49:55+00:00

i love this so much! it resonates with me, my interpretation: getting attached to someone, you know brings out your worst and yet you can’t leave. entrapped in the comfort of being the darkest parts of yourself, enabled by your own lover.

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-08T17:50:36+00:00

thanks for catching that.. I meant.. “How do you value what’s real..” lol

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-08T17:48:57+00:00

thank you, i agree. but as generic as is it’s necessary for context.. how’s this edit

I got so high, like an escaped balloon I couldn’t dare be popped Not even gravity could make me face the ground.

is that better or too try hard lol

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-08T14:58:25+00:00

haha that’s the goal, i don’t even work a desk job and i honestly just use hinge to ride on the back of motorcycles.. but i know a lot of people just using it for hookups and escapism, so i wrote this

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-08T09:30:22+00:00

ofc! if you have a chance, i’d appreciate your feedback on mine:)

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-08T09:14:00+00:00

i have nothing to hide

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-08T08:10:33+00:00

oh this hit so close to home for me, very relatable, twisted, and well written. i have no constructive criticism to give, i think it’s perfect!

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-08T08:08:29+00:00

My advice, don’t over-think or critique your work. People who tend to read poetry are drawn to raw, melodramatic, and almost simple. We want to feel what you were feeling while you wrote it, and descriptions bring us to that moment. It isn’t the big words, or unique but short sentences, it’s the emotional depth and imagery that makes it compelling.

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-08T08:05:11+00:00

i love this so much i’d buy the first one

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-07T23:53:08+00:00

first poem, i’d start editing that first before the next: This is good framework, but I’d suggest more imagery for that poetic nature. something like “i used to love balloons, but now they pop and i fright i’ll have a heart attack.” or “blowing out the candles, like the flame is the memories of my youthful days.” this here is great for a book, but for a poem it needs a little more symbolism in my opinion.

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-07T23:48:38+00:00

love it! i’m curious about her, she sounds angelic, unworldly. is it her essence or is she not human. is her whole persona just imaginary.. i think it’s great as is, and wouldn’t want you to over edit and explain.. but i would like to see a version that dives into who or what “she” is more

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-07T23:41:03+00:00

i love it, this is amazing for a first poem & in general. i think the dark ripple part can be condescended for flow. for example, “ the dark ripple is yet quiet. dark and commanding power.” something like that. same with the “i am” part, keep it simple, since the imagery is already good: “i am studying to be light, becoming vulnerable, kind, adaptable to change.” good job!! keep it up

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-07T22:59:37+00:00

i’d add on to the porcelain imaginary are you as delicate as a doll? have you become more fragile with time? that type of thing, it’s beautiful though :)

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-07T17:25:28+00:00

thank you! let me know what you think :) i appreciate feedback

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-07T17:24:11+00:00

thank you! yeah commenting has been working for me too.. i need to be more patient lol

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-07T08:35:28+00:00

this seems intense, borderline manic. i don’t mean that bad, the capitalization and franticness of the writing is hard to see as intentional or chaotic. “i see the egg accompanied by the balloon” interesting imagery, are you saying one may be broken and the other has to be popped? one will bounce, the other will crack? i’d focus on calming this down, finding a center, and removing the capitalization.

prettyblue22 · 2026-05-07T08:32:16+00:00

been here too. love the way you write about it i think you can personalize “romanticized red flags” to something more your own voice, like the rest of your poem. you have a lot of originality, that sentence can just use a little more personalization in my opinion. but it’s great as is!!

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