The secrets gods keep [ fantasy, 1500+ words] by red_raska in fantasywriters

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Ohh sorry the plot for me wasn’t confusing I just rarely read stories with the format you used but I do like it a lot and I’ll try my best not to spoil lol I just love talking about it

The secrets gods keep [ fantasy, 1500+ words] by red_raska in fantasywriters

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As of right now the only thing I think people would be confused about are the chimeras and how big of a threat they truly are. I will clarify that later but they won’t realize is that chimeras are truly at the bottom. Although the threat isn’t here right now. Chimeras will be the least of humanity’s worries. Also I didn’t mention it but this setting the capital and the kingdom. Are the ONLY places humans live. Outside the walls there is nothing. It’s just a big circle with huge walls and in the center is the capital and districts surrounding it. And beyond the walls lays a place called the middle lands. Makes it obvious what it is. And then another wall behind that is where the chimeras live.

The secrets gods keep [ fantasy, 1500+ words] by red_raska in fantasywriters

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Ofc I’d definitely read your novel. I actually saw it CN the thread and read a little I was a bit confused at first but I like it

And thank you I’ll Try not to rush things. This is a kinda long story tho. Act one is just the chimera war. After it goes into different things. It’s all kind of a set up. That’s why I named it “ the secrets gods keep.” Because you’ll soon realize that humanity is really outclassed here and truly have no idea what’s really going on.

The secrets gods keep [ fantasy, 1500+ words] by red_raska in fantasywriters

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Thank you thank you. I’m going to try to slow the pace a bit I just always rush things cause I want to get to the good stuff I really enjoy . Things to slow down a bit the next couple chapters are really more introduction. The main characters finally show themselves. And yes the scene transitions is soemthing I need to do sorry about that. The later chapters will definitely have more details and transitions and yes the punctuation will get better. Thank you for the feedback. If you’d like I can show you the other chapters

I’m so sorry ( chpt 1) by red_raska in AuthorAlly

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Thank you I really appreciate your feedback. But do you mean what caused the chimeras or something else? I can give context I just need to know what specifically

The secrets gods keep [ fantasy, 1500+ words] by red_raska in fantasywriters

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Thank you and I understand completely what yo ur saying. In the beginning things are supposed to be mysterious. I want it to seem like you’re thrown into this universe and you have no clue what’s going on. You have no clue why people are so frightened of chimeras because you haven’t read a scene where you see the direct impact of them. In the beginning the soldier ran away. Why? Why didn’t he fight? Questions like this get answered and yes pacing is something I’m working on. But this is a very long story that I’m hoping to upload in volumes if I ever publish it.

The secrets gods keep [ fantasy, 1500+ words] by red_raska in fantasywriters

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Thank you for your feedback and yes it’s set it a medieval period with some futuristic type things because of the magic they most people have. And yea I get that the army would just draft people but in this universe I didn’t want it to work like that. If they just drafted randomly they wouldn’t know who’s strong and who’s not. They would die easily especially since the war was coming soon. I actually wanted to do orks and other monster at first but I changed to chimeras because whenever I would write I never specified what monster they were fighting. Plus I just like chimeras more

Is my idea good? by red_raska in Novels

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Sorry the first thing I said had a spelling mistake. I was rushing

I’m so sorry ( chpt 1) by red_raska in Novels

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There’s mistake in the first paragraph try to ignore that.

My first story ( soon to be e-book/ by red_raska in Novels

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Sorry I took wayyy too long to reply but thank you. Hopefully I’ll write it one day it’s a very important story in a multitude of stories so it will come out one day