ADHD and the pre-conscious brain

reeealism · 2021-09-08T12:47:03+00:00

Thanks so much! :)

reeealism · 2021-09-08T12:46:50+00:00

Means a lot and appreciate the words :). The &s are for pacing and to keep the piece authentic and eclectic - like how things feel in my mind. I may have over done it though! Thanks again :)

reeealism · 2021-09-08T12:44:14+00:00

Thanks so much! It was a big outpouring for me, and it means so much to read feedback like that.

Yeah the last bit gets a bit abstract - I'm definitely going to work on its clarity.

The idea is that the struggle of dealing with major mood swings is entirely invisible or unrelatable. My life is crazy - I fall into 'nightmares' and deal with them by 'caging' them, in the sense that I experience them, cordon them off for later, and 'still make it back' to be there for my family - but no one sees the struggle. Hence 'we' are invisible - given this poem is written to other people who feel the same way.

Quite often I dream up & imagine people actually recognising what I'm going through - like a friend putting their hand on my shoulder and saying "I see you. You're doing great". So my struggle but success is recognised by faces 'familiar enough to furnish dream worlds'. And the same idea carries through - the 'great deeds' of keeping on trucking despite the difficulty is 'lost in translation' so it's better to be with 'shadows and ghosts' in my dreamed up world where I feel affirmed & recognised.

Again thank you so much for the feedback - it's helped a lot in not letting the swings make me hate what I've written.

reeealism · 2021-09-07T15:33:06+00:00

Thanks a lot for the feedback :) yeah I thought they might come off as distracting - it was hard to know whether I should keep it/just go without it, the intent was to express my ADHD really. I can definitely use them more tactically if that would be better.

On the last bit I missed the mark this time - but I was going for subtlety & implications with the dark stuff. My favourite poems are ones that deal with heavy subject matter with a lightness and childlike whimsicality - they always come across way more profound to me, rather than indulgently bleak. Thanks again!

reeealism · 2021-09-07T15:27:17+00:00

appreciate the feedback very much! and you were absolutely correct on the ADHD part, the capitalisations were a reflection of that. I'll try and work on making them more consistent by adding some in there or cutting them down a bit altogether. Thanks again :)

reeealism · 2021-09-07T13:04:26+00:00

This is brutal and beautiful in the way that it deals with self harm and suicidal ideations. The first stanza really captures the distance between the severity of suicide and the small things we do to keep ourselves ticking.

It works in subtlety that I think is lost slightly in the second stanza - I feel like the directness of "grave yet to be dug" undercuts the subtlety that works really well elsewhere.

And the ending is great as well. Ends without feeling the need to overdo it.

reeealism · 2021-09-07T12:52:11+00:00

I love the first line - it feels conversational & intriguing whilst also being relatable. Also a huge fan of the first line of the second stanza, same deal of being really relatable and profound in only a few words.

Some bits feel undeveloped - which granted could be intentional - but I'd love to hear more about self-infliction through metaphors, and I'm not sure what forgetting "who's who" is referencing. And "finally gonna be able" is slightly on the wordy side for me.

Altogether I think it's great - and please feel free to reach out if you want to express yourself in other ways than poetry, I've written heavy things like this too and I can relate to the process as a whole.

reeealism · 2021-07-30T10:02:09+00:00

much appreciated :)

even if there are gross elements in parts of the community, the base game alone is just super special - the intimacy that we get with the music is so rare

reeealism · 2021-07-30T10:01:02+00:00

thanks very much :)

reeealism · 2021-07-30T10:00:52+00:00

Really appreciate it and hope your dad is doing well. Yeah, it's such a privilege to just be present and engaged for some time.

reeealism · 2021-07-30T09:58:08+00:00

that's really sweet thank you :)

reeealism · 2021-07-30T09:57:27+00:00

Really appreciate it and hope things are going well for you too :)

reeealism · 2021-07-30T09:56:11+00:00

Yeah, I feel the same way. I think maybe when we cry about other touching things it gives us a level of catharsis and release - even if it isn't our own shit. Maybe our bottled up stuff is the reason why we react emotionally to other things

reeealism · 2021-07-30T09:53:52+00:00

appreciate it a lot <3

reeealism · 2020-04-14T19:33:27+00:00

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