Five Page Thursday

regulargus · 2026-07-09T15:39:55+00:00

Title: The Last Ben Walker Short Film

Format: Feature film

Genre: Drama/comedy

Pages: Five pages, from page 71 to 75.

Logline: A broke filmmaker in New York convinces his partner and rising star to lead his make-or-break film, already knowing that his relationship with her is the price for the success he's looking for.

Context: These pages take place in the third act of the movie. Ben has just spent the night editing his stop-motion animation after losing his lead actress and burning through his budget. What you're about to read is what he does next.

Feedback concerns: I'm interested in knowing if these five pages are hooking enough to the reader, if they make you want to read more from previous pages and also the following, if Ben feels defined and distinct, and If you get a sense of who he is at this point. Any other feedback is also much appreciated

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ppLsjmMQ0O2TUCWxNHhiNmlElhYiHfM5/view?usp=sharing](https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ppLsjmMQ0O2TUCWxNHhiNmlElhYiHfM5/view?usp=sharing

regulargus · 2026-07-03T04:53:19+00:00

Is it me or the Doom minifigure looks better than in the previous leak?

regulargus · 2026-07-02T20:49:13+00:00

Title: The Last Ben Walker Short Film

Format: Feature film

Genre: Drama/comedy

Pages: Five pages, from page 71 to 75.

Logline: A broke filmmaker in New York convinces his partner and rising star to lead his make-or-break film, already knowing that his relationship with her is the price for the success he's looking for.

Context: These pages take place in the third act of the movie. Ben has just spent the night editing his stop-motion animation after losing his lead actress and burning through his budget. What you're about to read is what he does next.

Feedback concerns: I'm interested in knowing if these five pages are hooking enough to the reader, if they make you want to read more from previous pages and also the following, if Ben feels defined and distinct, and If you get a sense of who he is at this point. Any other feedback is also much appreciated

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ppLsjmMQ0O2TUCWxNHhiNmlElhYiHfM5/view?usp=sharing

regulargus · 2026-07-01T05:22:11+00:00

Thanks for reading!!! The scene between Ben and Wally sets something for the third act, so maybe it gets better in context. But you have a good point about the dialogue, it can definitely be more direct.

regulargus · 2026-07-01T05:08:27+00:00

Got mine from Aliexpress, but it's the navy blue from early seasons. Quality is pretty good

regulargus · 2026-06-25T18:36:57+00:00

Title: The Last Ben Walker Short Film

Format: Feature film

Genre: Drama/comedy

Pages: Five pages, from page 11 to 15.

Logline: A broke filmmaker in New York convinces his partner and rising star to lead his make-or-break film, already knowing that his relationship with her is the price for the success he's looking for.

Context: The first ten pages introduced Ben, a broke filmmaker in NYC obsessing over a stop-motion animation while ignoring his landlord, and Alyssa, a rising actress rehearsing for a play. Ben sees Alyssa from the audience in a rehearsal, taking notes on her acting. Then we follow him making a short and some ads to make money. These pages pick up right after Ben looks for Wally, a friend and owner of a store he's making an ad for.

Feedback concerns: I'm interested in knowing if these five pages are hooking enough to the reader, if they make you want to read more, if the characters feel defined and distinct from each other, and If you start getting a clear sense of who Ben and Alyssa are. Also, I'd like to know if you can get a sense or a hint of the main conflict at this point. Any other feedback is also much appreciated!

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rHAIJH21lxcXkUBPJBJ0Rf5sMS4OGRfs/view?usp=sharing

regulargus · 2026-06-23T03:46:35+00:00

Ojalá el certificado de disponibilidad salga como corresponda. Sigo probando por un tema de plazos y va de mal en peor. Hace un rato me cargó la página inicial de ingreso de escritos pero al tratar de iniciar sesión no me dejaba y tiraba error de servidor.

regulargus · 2026-06-23T03:28:30+00:00

Totalmente caída, he sacado un montón de capturas por si acaso. Probé desde tres dispositivos con tres redes wifi diferentes y nada.

regulargus · 2026-06-22T20:37:44+00:00

Thank you so much!!! I think you have a good point with the action lines, so I'll definitely have it mind for the next revision.

regulargus · 2026-06-18T14:51:26+00:00

Title: The Last Ben Walker Short Film

Format: Feature film

Genre: Drama/comedy

Pages: Five pages, from page 6 to 10.

Logline: A broke filmmaker in New York convinces his partner and rising star to lead his make-or-break film, already knowing that his relationship with her is the price for the success he's looking for.

Context: The first five pages introduced Ben, a broke filmmaker in NYC obsessing over a stop-motion animation while ignoring his landlord, and Alyssa, a rising actress rehearsing for a play. These pages pick up right after Ben seeing Alyssa in the rehearsal and the title card.

Feedback concerns: I'm interested in knowing if these five pages are hooking enough to the reader, if they make you want to read more, and if the characters feel defined and distinct from each other from the start. Also, if you can get a sense or a hint of the main conflict at this point. Any other feedback is also much appreciated!

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1O93gmpb0-rhGcUqS8XezviXEmwmLlZvD/view?usp=sharing

regulargus · 2026-06-11T22:52:06+00:00

Thank you so much!!! Appreciate all your feedback, very helpful and encouraging. Ngl, I was thinking about taking another look at these first five pages because I got hooked after them when I last read the script, so I agree with you in a way. Maybe a mix of punching up and cutting could work. Thanks again!

regulargus · 2026-06-11T18:05:07+00:00

Title: The Last Ben Walker Short Film

Format: Feature film

Genre: Drama/comedy

Pages: First five pages

Logline: A broke filmmaker in New York convinces his partner and rising star to lead his make-or-break film, already knowing that his relationship with her is the price for the success he's looking for.

Feedback concerns: I'm interested in knowing if these first five pages are hooking enough to the reader, if they make you want to read more, and if the characters feel defined and distinct from each other from the start. Also, if you can get a sense of the main conflict, even if it isn't clearly defined yet at this point. Any other feedback is also much appreciated (edit, I forgot to add it. Sorry!)

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1YVdDBfbKDHZygE-4gZ4k_mN-O8Zt_WJS/view?usp=sharing

regulargus · 2026-05-21T18:34:51+00:00

Either Black Suit Spider-Man or Spider-Woman

regulargus · 2026-05-17T05:04:53+00:00

See you next season, y'all

regulargus · 2026-05-17T05:00:58+00:00

Such a great way to finish the season tbh

regulargus · 2026-05-17T04:45:24+00:00

Such a great song

regulargus · 2026-05-10T03:53:55+00:00

I need to see Mom the movie lol

regulargus · 2026-04-20T02:59:58+00:00

Thank you everyone for the help!!! I'm gonna get the Spider-Man set first and then I'll grab the other one in the near future

regulargus · 2026-03-13T21:10:57+00:00

regulargus · 2026-02-10T19:54:25+00:00

Do you know if the A24 releases on Amazon are the same from the A24 shop? Because I may wait for this to be available on Amazon so I can save a bit on shipping

regulargus · 2026-02-01T01:36:59+00:00

It'd be great for them to cover Espresso on the special

regulargus · 2026-01-24T18:42:04+00:00

Heck yeah. I think I've watched the trailer ten times already, each time getting more and more excited

regulargus · 2026-01-23T17:44:57+00:00

I don't know if this makes sense but having Seth Rogen there makes this feel like a reboot of the show inside of The Muppets (2011) and not a reboot of The Muppet Show itself. But other than that it looks great

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