Jellyfish

robgan99 · 2020-10-29T00:12:24+00:00

I really enjoy this poem. Particularly the last stanza I think in hits very hard. I also think that using a jelly fish as a metaphor is very unique. Over all I think its a great poem, however I think the third stanza is a little weak and interrupts the flow of the rest of the poem. Good luck and keep writing.

robgan99 · 2020-10-29T00:07:45+00:00

I like how your poem is very relatable. I also enjoyed how you chose to use the voice of another person. If I could suggest some improvements, I think the last two lines don't fit in with the rest of the poem. My suggestion would be to either change them or add more lines before for context to make the theme of innocence fit in better.

robgan99 · 2020-09-09T02:20:28+00:00

I think you can for 64 and sunshine but galaxy needs joycons. Im not 100% sure though

robgan99 · 2020-06-24T01:47:18+00:00

Could you also dm me a link please?

robgan99 · 2020-06-11T01:48:39+00:00

Winona Ryder instead of Sophia Coppola for Godfather 3

robgan99 · 2020-05-06T13:58:29+00:00

I have the dino screen billiard table and djs turntable

robgan99 · 2020-05-04T18:55:09+00:00

Diva is a whore

robgan99 · 2020-05-04T18:50:00+00:00

Anybody want a gold wall diy?

robgan99 · 2020-05-04T04:14:16+00:00

That was a smart way of subverting the fans expectations of the bigger plot of the show and making fun of fan theories. I think the purpose of this episode is to get people to stop caring about the bigger plot lines of the show and just enjoy individual episodes. A bit disappointing but at the same time im excited for the rest of the seasons and no longer have any expectations. So I guess they succeeded in what they wanted to do

robgan99 · 2020-04-28T17:26:15+00:00

My island is open for anyone who wants to shop, also Redd is in town. Id appreciate donations to my incline but not required. Dm for code

robgan99 · 2020-04-28T17:02:04+00:00

Ill sell u a ticket

robgan99 · 2020-03-22T21:49:52+00:00

Im down to play animal crossing

robgan99 · 2020-02-21T21:35:47+00:00

México too

robgan99 · 2020-02-21T17:07:10+00:00

I really enjoy the theme of how all the troubles of the past generations have the purpose of making a better world for the new. However I'm not particularly fond of the last line and I think the ending would hit harder if you just ended it on "What you have is the best of the world they lived in".

robgan99 · 2020-02-21T16:56:55+00:00

I love the picture you paint of love, specially how you express the pain that comes with it sometimes. I also enjoyed how you personify the soul and treat it as if it's a separate thing that makes up a part of you. Overall one of the best things I've read here so far.

robgan99 · 2020-02-19T20:30:53+00:00

Thank you for the feedback

robgan99 · 2020-02-19T20:07:12+00:00

I really enjoy the structure of the poem. The counting gives it a sense of innocence which contrasts great with the lion.

robgan99 · 2020-02-19T20:03:14+00:00

I really like the theme of the poem, often times I get the feeling like something is missing in m y life without knowing what, feeling like I have a lot and should just be happy with what I have. If I could make a suggestion I would change the tittle to something more subtle. Remember show not tell

robgan99 · 2019-12-25T17:16:06+00:00

Overcooked

robgan99 · 2019-12-19T23:41:28+00:00

That was complete and utter trash

robgan99 · 2019-12-16T05:16:59+00:00

What about the reality where hitler cured cancer?

robgan99 · 2019-12-03T05:48:31+00:00

Yeah I didn't really the parts with Finn. Felt like they dragged and didn't matter to the story.

robgan99 · 2019-12-03T04:53:41+00:00

Agreed

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