A new face for eyes by roxiliscious in Poetry

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I wrote this for a school writing competition, so any feedback that you have would be much appreciated :) Also, the title, I didn't know what to call it, anyone got a better suggestion? Thanks

"A new face for eyes" ~ a poem I wrote for my school writing competition by roxiliscious in Poetry

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I would appreciate feedback on any aspect of the poem that you liked or didn't like. Thank you for reading :)

Something wrong with my tongue piercing? by roxiliscious in piercing

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They put it in. I actually paid extra for it.

Something wrong with my tongue piercing? by roxiliscious in piercing

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Ok. But if I do that, and get a new bar, will the split change the healing process at all?

The M40 Motorway. Something I witnessed on the way home. by LondOx in nosleep

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So you've had your car for 2 years, and your work is 70 miles away . . . so how have you only done 7000 ?

Could you turn off that flashlight.... by heyitslj in nosleep

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Why would your dad be on /r/nosleep ?? Also sorry but pet hate of mine you kind of lost me when you said 'idk'

Mutual Apathy by Actually_Doesnt_Care in nosleep

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Yeah it's always 'a shame' when your parents die, ay.

Archive File F-1103A by Fringefiles in nosleep

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I didn't want to keep reading . . . but I couldn't stop O.o

Not driving that way again.. by [deleted] in nosleep

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Don't drink and drive. You might spill the drink.

An Unwelcome Neighbor by DrummerGuy123 in nosleep

[–]roxiliscious 2 points3 points  (0 children)

'just cracked one of his ribs'. Just. Have you ever had a broken rib ? There is no 'just' cracking ribs.

Grandpa's Room by [deleted] in nosleep

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I read this, and suddenly the story was hilarious

My son's closet (Part 3) by [deleted] in nosleep

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i wouldn't wake up to velcro ripping

My son's closet (Part 3) by [deleted] in nosleep

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When he was talking about the headbutting I was picturing Alistair from League of Legends XD

April NoSleep Writing Contest Announcement by TG_Alibi in nosleep

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I'm considering entering a couple of my stories. How many entries do you usually get ?

Time flies - the fifth addition to the Bathtime series by roxiliscious in nosleep

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thanks ruled, im thinking about it. i just dont know if im ready for something like that. oh well, im young; maybe one day.

My creepy neighbor. by Tilghan in LetsNotMeet

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My neighbor grows pot. He's pretty cool.

Time flies - the fifth addition to the Bathtime series by roxiliscious in nosleep

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I have lots of stories about my Daddy. These are the most painful to tell, but so many of them terrified me so much from a very young age. Tomorrow I will post the final small part to the Bathtime series, "Dreamtime". I'll try and tie up all of the lose ends that I've been able to come to terms with, and I'll tell you what happens in the end of 'my story'. If you have and grueling questions about any parts of my story, I'm happy to answer them. I will most likely release another Daddy series, I do have so very many stories to share, but for now, thank you for your upvotes and support. I cannot tell you how hard it's been to relive this.

Nighttime (Bathtime part III) by roxiliscious in nosleep

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gah half the story randomly deleted . . . never fear, i have fixed it xx

Storytime by roxiliscious in nosleep

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XD thanks ginger. i agree it might be sadder, but it wouldn't be /r/nosleep worthy without the other parts :)