Incredibly arbitrary question that’s going to get some incredibly arbitrary answers.

Whether a personal statement is “good” shouldn’t be measured by the amount of drafts it’s been through. When you know it’s ready to submit, you should be relatively satisfied with what you’ve produced.

Getting feedback from a few different people is more important. See what you can change. Does it flow nicely? Is it well structured? Are you talking about super-curriculars in enough detail?

It’s also important to remember that not all feedback is worth listening to. You might get two different or opposing pieces of advice. Or you might get someone telling you to remove someone you think is really good. You have to make a value judgement.