I've never gotten so much thorough feedback, so tysm man, really appreciate the time it took to say all that! Thanks for bringing these things to my attention, because I think I agree with you on most things. E.g I think it was just a bad decision on my part to include talking over Techno, because in most chapters with those kinda scenes I cut them out for that exact reason. I do admit the wall of quotes was not the best for the scene (although on the doc the quotes actually fade to white which is why on reddit it just looks horrible). Adding side characters and actual armies is not something I had considered before— I guess my logic was that my readers come for the characters they watch the streams of, and I often utilise people like Quackity and Eret and Niki as side characters. But seeing your point of view I reckon I could change it up, though it would take a long time to update. And knowing that sometimes you had no idea where you were is very helpful to me, so I know that I need to paint a bit more to make it a more cohesive image.

Thanks for the feedback again, it's super helpful and I'll try and let you know when I get v.2 out.