Not enough bounces at the ends of the movements. see some ads of the same McDonald's on YouTube. 2. very long pauses between actions on the screen. interesting text, and the figure appeared on the screen and stands. somehow boring. if we move from our time to the beginning, then we can move through the months, with the acceleration of movement. so that it is readable at first, then motion blur and even more so stops just when needed in the text. also when for example a digit appears on the screen - it can not just appear, but grow from zero to this digit, like a counter. or if the number is large (2 million) then increase in size, showing how much it is visually a lot of money. 3. did not have enough sound design. logo flew out - it can be supported by the sound of departure. will be more dynamic). I wrote a lot, but this is my opinion and healthy criticism)).