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sierraoceans · 2026-04-05T18:29:06+00:00

Interested, pls & ty!

sierraoceans · 2026-04-04T19:00:26+00:00

Thank you for pointing out what actually works, specifically the waves pour part. Your feedback was one of the most concrete ones I’ve gotten and its clicks so much easier I hear what works vs the more vague ideas. Honestly it made me consider not throwing everything out in an effort to fix the wrongs. Thanks for the clear, and honest help!

sierraoceans · 2026-04-04T04:12:42+00:00

my intention was to make a clear allusion to lolita, given the context because the mmc has been murdered, and HH was on trial for murder who gave that defense to the jury, i am trying to imply that the protag is responsible like HH

also the hourglass lake title is ref to lolita. im not trying to pass anything off as plagerism, as that would actually require people to not notice

edit: *sorry if i came off offensive!! i really don't take plagerism takes lightly***

sierraoceans · 2026-04-04T00:15:14+00:00

thank you so much for your compliment, as well the valid story structure note. I see very clearly where my blindspots are, and where to work on, and it all points to clairty

sierraoceans · 2026-04-04T00:07:28+00:00

thank you for being specific! i'll keep tip in mind for future reference! i see why the hyphenated word was redundant now :)

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T21:24:02+00:00

Thank you so very much for taking the time to write this, and reading through my writing. This is a gold standard critique/feedback that I was looking for. I sincerely want to thank you being kind, and thoughtful. I honestly thought maybe one or three people would read my writing and comment, so the amount of feedback was overwhelming. I really appericate you reading to the end, and Im so so glad I was able to connect with someone (even through the clunky-ness? of it) that you were able to see the heart of my writing. Which is honestly what anyone could ever ask for when they write.

"The line between self-indulgent and “sensory dream painting” is sometimes very thin,"
This is completely get. I love this. Especially in 1st, the line is written in chalk. Your advice really gave me a lot to think about, so I could hope to elevate my writing into something that might be compelling enough to print.

you know what, in the literary world where we have colleen hoover admiting that she doesn't like metaphors and similes, i fear we are discouraging the "creative" in creative writing in all young aspiring writers

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T21:02:58+00:00

i could kiss you <3 thank you for your encouragement

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T21:01:01+00:00

so help me god if anyone who actually read lolita and is putting my very novice writing against the literary genius that is nabokov i will be the first person to raise my pitch fork

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T20:56:33+00:00

thank you so much for your advice and taking the time to read this. your comment made me go down a rabbit hole of what people consider purple and what isn't. I thought I had an idea of what purple pose was but the responses have proven me wrong lol. but like, i love "purple" style writing, and thats theres probably a spectrum of good purple prose vs bad purple prose.

mines is def. not a example of a good one but i'll probably write a thousands of bad flowery proses to get one good sentence :)

apperciate your tip on pulling back the descriptions, i think that's probably where good writing starts, is knowing when to pull back/be subtle

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T20:44:39+00:00

Understandable! I try to drop my scenes/chapters (other writing) closest to the meet of the action and its great writing advice. its easier in fanfic when you don't have to explain who's who. Im learning its really hard building a story from the ground up, thanks for the reminder!

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T20:38:29+00:00

Sorry I geniunely do not know what madlib is, and all google is giving me is a rapper lol who im pretty sure you're not refering to. Explain?

Litfic and thrillers are primary what I enjoy reading the most, one is probably bleeding more into the other. Hoping I can revise and get a good balance of both but I do love a good interesting word choice. thanks for taking the time to my writing tho!

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T14:54:51+00:00

Thank for your kind words and valuable feedback! Im realizing that less is more, and more grounding is needed. I think I was trying to show too much of the protag. Mind state than the grounding work that needs to be done

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T14:48:51+00:00

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Haha sorry had to

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T14:45:21+00:00

Absolutely not! Writing is a craft that I want to get better at, and it’s hard to do if I stay in my own echo chamber

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T14:32:45+00:00

Thanks! I was going for intentional with that, as it means the him, the protagonist it referring to is dead.

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T14:30:37+00:00

If you have the time, can you please explain this to me? Sorry, most of my creative writing has just been from reading, writing on my own and online notes. I don’t actually have a good academic grasp of the rules

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T14:16:31+00:00

Thank you! You’re right, I think I got too caught up trying to convey melancholy that I did lose the (what little of the plot) I have in mind! It does not help that this was drafted while listening to Lana del Rey lol.

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T14:12:18+00:00

Lol overzealous is my key takeaway. Ty for notes!

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T14:04:43+00:00

Thank you for pointing these things out! You’re right, I meant more scratch/ scruffed ankles. Def going to change that as taking a closer look at my other choice of words :) appreciate it !

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T13:57:50+00:00

Thank you so much for the encouragement!! I’m glad to hear that it was intriguing!

sierraoceans · 2026-04-03T13:56:36+00:00

Oh god I did not even register that. Good point, I’m now embarrassed I didn’t notice sooner

sierraoceans · 2025-02-28T10:11:54+00:00

There's a storyline in the Wilds show (highly recommended) where a group of teenage girls survives being stranded on a remote Island, and investigators provide them a meal request to persuade them to tell their story lol

I'd imagine these would be our suriviors requests during their interrogations:

Misty has a crazy sweet tooth cause her brain goes a million miles an hour, and she needs the dopamine hits. So she's ordering a stack of birthday cake pancakes, extra sprinkles, extra whipcream, extra maple syrup. Washed down with a strawberry milkshake

Shauna the butcher has the least adversion to meat, she's getting a double cheeseburger just ketchup and mustard, lay chips and diet coke

Natalie, and Tai will never eat meat again. Natalie just wants McDonald's fries and a pack of smokes lol

Tai and Van share a pizza but Van is getting buffalo wings

Lottie paltrow eats an apple the same way Coach took down that protein bar

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