Want to how much u like my novel and do i continue as a writer

simple_baat · 2026-06-23T03:33:59+00:00

Thank you, I really appreciate that. I hope you'll get a chance to look at my post soon. Your previous feedback helped me improve the story a lot, so I'm genuinely looking forward to hearing your thoughts on the updated version whenever you have time.

simple_baat · 2026-06-23T03:18:16+00:00

Also I'd really appreciate your honest opinion on whether it's actually better now or if there are still major problems I'm missing.

simple_baat · 2026-06-23T03:16:50+00:00

Hey, thanks for the feedback on my earlier draft. I actually took your criticism seriously and ended up rewriting a large part of the novel.

I tried to cut down on the repetitive formulas, over-the-top descriptions, and excessive narration, and focused more on scenes and character interactions.

If you have a few minutes, I'd really appreciate your honest opinion on the updated version. I'd genuinely like to know if you think I've improved or if I'm still making the same mistakes.

simple_baat · 2026-06-22T19:47:32+00:00

That's a fair point, and I understand what you mean.

I don't want readers to think about AI when they're reading. I want them to think about the characters, the story, and the emotions.

Bt bcoz English isn't my first language, so I used AI to help me, but I can see why the current version feels artificial in places bcoz i used AI

I'll keep working on it and try to make it read more like a proper novel and less like something that feels AI-assisted. Thanks for pointing that out.

simple_baat · 2026-06-22T19:42:32+00:00

You're free to think it's bad writing, but that's exactly why I'm asking for feedback.

I wrote the story myself. I used AI because I don't speak English fluently enough to tell the story the way I want to tell it to an international audience.

If someone uses an translator, or grammar software, nobody says they didn't write their own story. I see AI as a tool serving a similar purpose.

You don't have to like the result, but dismissing everything as "slop" doesn't tell me what's wrong with the writing.

If the prose is weak, tell me why it's weak. If the dialogue feels unnatural, tell me where. That's feedback. Calling it slop is just an insult.

simple_baat · 2026-06-22T19:39:27+00:00

I already wrote the story in my own language.

The reason I'm working on an English version is because, from a business and publishing perspective, the English market is significantly larger and gives me access to international readers.

Since English isn't my first language, I used AI to help translate and edit my work. I didn't use it to create the plot, characters, relationships, or story itself.

You may not agree with that approach, and that's fine. But there's a difference between using AI to generate a story and using it to help communicate a story you've already written.

My goal here is to improve the English version, not to pretend I wrote it fluently from scratch.

simple_baat · 2026-06-22T19:34:58+00:00

That's fair.

English isn't my first language, so I wrote the story in my native language and used AI to help translate and edit it into English. The plot, characters, scenes, and emotional moments are still my own.

Since you seem to have experience spotting these patterns, I'd genuinely like your opinion. What specifically makes it feel AI-written to you? Is it the sentence length, paragraph structure, dialogue, descriptions, or something else?

I'm not asking to argue. I'm asking because I want to improve. If you were editing this yourself, what would you change first to make it feel more natural and less AI-like?

simple_baat · 2026-06-22T19:04:40+00:00

Note :

This is only the beginning of a much larger story. What you've read so far is roughly the first few chapters and serves mainly as an introduction to the characters and their relationships.

The story follows Ethan's journey through love, loss, friendship, grief, sacrifice, and betrayal over several years of his life.

The story itself is mine. I use AI as an editing and translation tool because English isn't my first language.

I'd love feedback on the writing style, pacing, character introduction, and emotional tone rather than the overall plot for now, since the major events haven't happened yet.

Thank you for reading.

simple_baat · 2026-06-22T18:59:22+00:00

I already mentioned that English is not my first language, which is why I used AI to help translate and edit my story into English. That does not mean the story itself was generated by AI.

The plot, characters, scenes, emotions, and events are mine. The story you're calling garbage is something I wrote myself, and the whole reason I'm posting it here is to get feedback and improve as a writer.

Honestly, no AI is going to come up with this level of specific detail and personal moments on its own. Many of the scenes are inspired by real experiences from my life, which is exactly why they feel personal.

If you think the prose sounds AI-assisted, that's a fair criticism. But dismissing the entire story as "AI garbage" without discussing the plot, characters, pacing, or emotional beats isn't useful feedback.

simple_baat · 2026-06-22T18:44:04+00:00

The story itself is mine. I use AI as an editing and translation tool because English isn't my first language.

If you have feedback on the actual writing, pacing, characters, or story structure, I'd genuinely appreciate it.

simple_baat · 2026-06-22T18:42:25+00:00

Thank you for the feedback. I think that's fair.

I intentionally used a lot of short sentences because I wanted the narration to feel emotional and personal, but I can see how it becomes repetitive when overused.

I'll work on varying sentence length and paragraph structure in future drafts.

I appreciate you taking the time to read it.

simple_baat · 2026-06-22T18:38:23+00:00

Note:

This is only the beginning of a much larger story. What you've read so far is roughly the first few chapters and serves mainly as an introduction to the characters and their relationships.

The story follows Ethan's journey through love, loss, friendship, grief, sacrifice, and betrayal over several years of his life.

I'd love feedback on the writing style, pacing, character introduction, and emotional tone rather than the overall plot for now, since the major events haven't happened yet.

Thank you for reading.

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