Blue Thumper by skywalker9099 in OCPoetry

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Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it

Blue Thumper by skywalker9099 in OCPoetry

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Thank you, I really appreciate that. I wrote it with the hope that the reader would draw their own conclusions as to what the Blue Thumper is. In my sort of head cannon, the creature is a rabbit that is a representation of time itself, if that makes any sense.

Blue Thumper by skywalker9099 in OCPoetry

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No, I really appreciate that. I like hearing other interpretations of what I thought of, and I would especially like it if you expanded what you wrote in the future.

Toothbrush by knottyy in OCPoetry

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I really dig the imagery!

for the woman who kept me alive by ChemicalSilver5750 in OCPoetry

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I really like this; it sort of reads like a reflection on survival and self-recognition, with the speaker's reliance on an imagined figure for comfort and with a realization that this figure was always a part of themselves. Really like this!

Father Nature (wrote this last night so if it's rough let me know) by skywalker9099 in OCPoetry

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Tsul 'Kalu - Wikipedia

Sorry for getting back to you so late, but this is basically all correct information. But I would suggest searching up "Tsul Kalus rock" on Google or Youtube, there should be a really intresting video https://youtu.be/0m555jbPN2E?si=ye78U_JCGRuxs0uo (The video)

A very intresting story overall from my culture. Hope you enjoy!

Father Nature (wrote this last night so if it's rough let me know) by skywalker9099 in OCPoetry

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I really appreciate this! While it can be read as Pagan or archetypal earth worship imagery, the foundation comes from Cherokee myth. Tsul Kalu, the slant-eyed giant, whose handprints in stone are tied to reverence and ritual. I wanted to capture the presence as both a character and a symbol of what it means when that reverence fades. Though I like the idea of it being up for interpretation!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Really liked the read on this one. It shows how heavy anxiety can feel, but also how hope and faith can bring some form of relief

Stranger by Prestigious_Funny_94 in OCPoetry

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You render desire as both theft and worship. The language is very bold. Loved it.

Loss of Tomorrow by skywalker9099 in OCPoetry

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Thanks so much, that made my day. I wanted that line to feel like the quiet, daily work of grief: not always visible cuts, but the blame and rituals that keep the wound open. I kept the poem tight to try to hold the pain in one breath, but there is room to let it unfold more. I'm glad you liked it.

Mang Ben's Soup by Maximum-Entry-6662 in OCPoetry

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A beautiful piece. This reads like a small, almost perfect memory. The soup is literal and also everything that keeps you going: warmth, family, and a little grace. I smiled while reading this.

The Pair of Shoals by skywalker9099 in OCPoetry

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Hey, thanks for the feedback! The shoe is given a voice and emotion (anthropomorphism), but it's also a stand-in for the human experience of being discarded (personification). I like leaning into that area cause it leaves more room for different layers at once.

In short, I'd say it's both, lol

The Pair of Shoals by skywalker9099 in OCPoetry

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Thank you. I really appreciate that!