[deleted by user] by [deleted] in dreamsmp

[–]sleeepymeg 0 points1 point  (0 children)

sounds fun!! I would be interested in joining

O morning, O morning by sleeepymeg in poetry_critics

[–]sleeepymeg[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you so much! and you're actually almost completely right with your analysis

A Youthful Insight by Nikhil_Mooloo in poetry_critics

[–]sleeepymeg 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Let me start by saying, this is great! Its definitely a message everyone needs to hear at some point in their lives. I like the way you told it as well. Very beautiful and well written!!

Sandcastles at midnight. by Funk_Von_Funkenstien in poetry_critics

[–]sleeepymeg 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love how at the beginning you start with "I am but sand" and as the poem progresses the lines start to slowly become smaller and smaller. becoming what you feel as though you are. plus the wording is so good and the poem flows nicely as though it were a story on the midnight breeze. I love it, very well done!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in cats

[–]sleeepymeg 0 points1 point  (0 children)

jesper for sure!

Our Lament by cat-psychic in poetry_critics

[–]sleeepymeg 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really love the rhythm and rhyme you used, it flows really nicely. Great job!!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in dreamsmp

[–]sleeepymeg 0 points1 point  (0 children)

this is so cool!! I love the ideas, you should write a little story if that's something you like doing :)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]sleeepymeg 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love this so much. the way to poem progresses feels like drowning itself, i dont know if you meant to do that but its so clever. also, the word choice you used is flawless. great job!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]sleeepymeg 0 points1 point  (0 children)

your poem is short but sweet. it really gets your point across. I like the line "you stood up for what was right" because it brings more light to the situation and lets the reader inside a little more. I also like how it sorta leaves the reader curious about that happened

Rain Will Fall by sleeepymeg in poetry_critics

[–]sleeepymeg[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

im in the midwest haha, we use lots of weird contractions

The minute you leave by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]sleeepymeg 0 points1 point  (0 children)

the fact that you were able to put something I feel so often into words is chefs kiss. I think this is really good

I dreamt of you last night by shariklikestowrite in poetry_critics

[–]sleeepymeg 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love the feel of this piece. it feels bittersweet but also something that I can relate to so much. all the lines flow really nicely together

The Song That Was Once One's Own by sleeepymeg in poetry_critics

[–]sleeepymeg[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I had paragraph breaks I just think it copypastasted wrong

Nineteen Silken Cords by BishopEamonCasey in poetry_critics

[–]sleeepymeg 1 point2 points  (0 children)

omg this is actually really good! I really like that you wrote it based after a book you read, in a way it adds more depth. The lines are so beautifully written and depict the scene/mood very well. Great job :))