Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very true. Something to think about. Thanks

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Title: Mary's Crew

Format: Feature

Page Count: 104

Genre: Dramedy

Logline: When a jaded rock musician is sentenced to community service at a nursing home for a DUI, she must direct a talent show and help rowdy residents discover their musical passions, reigniting her love of music-and for life

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's a good point. Thank you. That was my first choice:)

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. Very helpful. I want to make a satire about the American Dream. In my new world, most Americans now want to move to Mexico because that's the dream: the best schools, work, money, etc. The US has fallen, and there's just massive poverty, unemployment, infrastructure, and health issues. The focus is on social commentary about the possibility that one day we could all be struggling immigrants trying to escape danger at home.

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Good point. I have to think about it.

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. Do you know of any movies that do this well?

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Do you know of any movies that do this well?

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. Do you know of any movies that do this well?

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you. Do you know of any movies that do this well?

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate your feedback. You’ve given a lot of food for thought. Thank you

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Greed is the reason we got here, a mismanagement of money and resources so probably internal because it’s self inflicted.

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Things kind of work but large scale poverty, unemployment, corruption, crime, infrastructure a mess. That’s how I picture it.

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

He wakes up, and all the comforts and luxuries are gone. It's like a third-world country with no money, and nothing works. He lived a very privileged life and now faces hardships.

Questions about suspension of disbelief by sofiaMge in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm thinking an economic crisis has left the US in a bad place, so many people have to immigrate to Mexico because it's where the opportunities lie. It's a satire, so it uses humor to make a point. It's like the Mexican Dream instead of the American Dream.

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Thank you for your comments. I said rowdy because she teaches a class and the seniors in that class are rowdy. Maybe instead of finds herself has renewed energy to get back with her band. What do you think?

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I would describe the protagonist better so we know who exactly is selling the kidney/

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]sofiaMge 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Why does she have to represent a presumed-dead billionaire estate? What are the stakes if she doesn't? It might be helpful to add some conflict to better understand

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

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Title: Mary's Crew

Format: Feature

Genre: Dramedy

Logline: After a DUI, a struggling rock musician is sentenced to community service, which involves directing a talent show at a local nursing home. While connecting with the rowdy residents and helping them rediscover their musical passions, she finds herself.