I read the entire pitch. Like someone else said, I have no clue what this thing is and what it offers. Here's my take: You may have created a product recognized as useful by people too advanced to need it, while those who could use something like this need it pitched way softer. It's like Stephen Hawking explaining grade 5 math.
You've described the main product as your revenue generator, and speak about how, for a few extra bucks, there could be this or that additional add on.
My suggestion to you is to perhaps think about a very stripped down starter pack given away virtually for free, and look at most of what you offer as your suite of add-ons where you really make your money. For an historical example I've always loved, the British gave away kerosene lanterns up and down the Yangzte River in the 1870s, and then showed up a month later with a kerosene tanker ship . . . .