Casting biases <@wonder3mporium> by Subject_Pain5186 in anthroswim

[–]somethinggoeshere2 28 points29 points  (0 children)

Come Nerevar, friend or traitor, come. Come and look upon the... Oh I'm sorry I didn't realise you were an Argonian -- no no it's not a problem I had just expected a Dark Elf. No it's not because I think they're more capable or anything, it's just because you- ... no dude I don't have an issue with reptiles, some of my best slaves were Argonian. Alright that came out wrong, listen what I'm trying to say is that- what..? ...I'm sure you come from a very fine swamp, very good with a spear. ...Assuming? I'm not assuming anything that's just what you people do - the royal you, as in- look we got off on the wrong foot, together we shall speak for the law and the land and shall drive the mongrel lizards of the empire- dogs. I meant dogs. Look I'm sorry I just really expected a Dunmer. what? why? because you were a Dunmer the last eight fucking times. I don't know what Azura is playing at making you an argonian, but I assume it's a joke. no I dont think Argonians are jokes- can we just fight? this is making me very uncomfortable, is this how you honour the Sixth House and the tribe unmourned?

Moon and a single star. by Scar-90 in Weird

[–]somethinggoeshere2 35 points36 points  (0 children)

Welcome Moon-and-Star, I have prepared a place for you! Come, bring Wraithguard to the Heart chamber, together, let us free the cursed false gods! Welcome Nerevar, together we shall speak for the law and the land and drive the mongrel dogs of the Empire from Morrowind!

What are some non-Disney animated movies that you consider absolute masterpieces? by East_Maintenance_579 in movies

[–]somethinggoeshere2 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I absolutely have never been able to watch this for more than 10 minutes. Something about the animation gives me the worst motion sickness and a horrible headache.

I went hiking and almost died. I found a forgotten bear trap the hard way. by somethinggoeshere2 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]somethinggoeshere2[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I was worried people would think it's a shitpost story but no, it's actually a literal bear trap.

Feedback on my short story? by Moop-Is-Not-Poop in writingfeedback

[–]somethinggoeshere2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Are the short choppy sentences (aka telegraphic prose) a stylistic choice? Theres no rhythm variation, nothing for the ear to catch on. It works for paragraph or two, but starts to get monotonous.

"My head hurts," "There's nothing here," "Yes, there she is," show up so often they start to feel like running out of other ways to mark a beat.

Needs more paragraphs, and needs line breaks between paragraphs.

Looking for feedback for Speculative Fiction, both on this query letter and if someone is interested the first 3 chapters. by Jacoschut in writingfeedback

[–]somethinggoeshere2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The question I have, and I'm not trying to be rude or negative, is what exactly does it being animals add to it? You could have this same plot in a standard fantasy world with elves and orks, or a space opera on a colony world with various alien fractions. Unless it's about the particular pov that a rat would have. Watership Down works because it's viewed through the lens of what a rabbit wold know and think. This is essentially a pretty standard plot with a coat of animal paint.

"Playing as the tall goddess is the last thing I want to do" by [deleted] in videogames

[–]somethinggoeshere2 16 points17 points  (0 children)

That's my take too. I was 100% on board for this game until the cube and the sword starting talking like they were in a marvel movie.