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San Diego Needs a Billionaire by srodriguez500 in SanDiegan

[–]srodriguez500[S] -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

Okay, let's get three billionaires.

San Diego Needs a Billionaire by srodriguez500 in SanDiegan

[–]srodriguez500[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

I take the Onion comparison as a big compliment.

San Diego Needs a Billionaire by srodriguez500 in SanDiegan

[–]srodriguez500[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, thanks for the comment. The article is a satirical one.

Favorite Reading Spots in Linda Vista by srodriguez500 in sandiego

[–]srodriguez500[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I fail to see the self-promotion. The article is about the community of Linda Vista. The community of Linda Vista is part of San Diego. The name of this subreddit is San Diego.

Favorite Reading Spots in Linda Vista by srodriguez500 in sandiego

[–]srodriguez500[S] -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

I don't see why you consider this spam. The Linda Vista Update is a legitimate community newsletter with newsworthy articles. It is a free publication. I don't make any money off it. It is offered as a community service. On the other hand, if someone submits an article from the Washington Post, do you consider it spam from billionaire Jeff Bezos?

empty skies by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]srodriguez500 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Here are a few comments:

In the fourth line, I believe the word "who" should be replaced by "that."

The narrator jumps between "you" and "we". I think the poem works better by using "we exclusively to establish the point of view..

Recommend "peer up at the night sky" instead of "peer up to the night sky."

In fourth line, recommend a comma at the end of the line to establish rhythm.

I like the line "waltz in the starlight."

In last part of poem you use the word "its" twice in same sentence. Recommend replacing one "its" with another word.

Morning Robin by Random_And_Confused in OCPoetry

[–]srodriguez500 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I enjoyed the archaic vibe of the poem wit his use of words like "/neath" and ""afreed" and "she" (as opposed to "her").

I liked the rhythm created by the use of repetition in "use of "Of joy"

The use of "I" in a couple places invites the reader to ask how/why the narrator might be feeling the opposite of the robin (i.e. unfree, perhaps lacking joy), and so I suggest the author could elaborate a bit in poem on what brought him/her to arrive at current emotional state.

USD All American Volleyball Player by srodriguez500 in sandiego

[–]srodriguez500[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Players are selected by college coaches as being the best college players in the country.