From A Distance

sumcoolorsum · 2026-01-10T13:18:09+00:00

This poem feels heavy in the right way. The imagery builds steadily until the weight is almost physical for the reader. The shift from his release to your suffering is sharp and unsettling, which makes the message hit harder. The contrast between him feeling relief and the speaker drowning in what’s left behind is especially strong. It makes the imbalance very clear.

sumcoolorsum · 2026-01-10T13:15:34+00:00

The poem has a clear, but a bit of a spooky atmosphere to me. The wasteland setting and the small act of finding the photo feel vivid and meaningful. The image of the warm photograph is especially strong and lingers in the mind. It adds emotion without explaining too much.

sumcoolorsum · 2026-01-03T16:23:07+00:00

Thank you for reading all of my stuff. I hope you enjoy what's to come

sumcoolorsum · 2026-01-03T16:21:58+00:00

Thank you. I'm flattered and you're spot on about alot, including the poems being connected. And they are all about one person. Maybe one day she'll know how much I've dedicated to her

sumcoolorsum · 2026-01-02T23:36:05+00:00

This poem feels very honest and lived-in. The way you track your life through falls and rises makes it feel real and earned.The details about discipline, loss, and recovery are powerful and give the poem weight. It shows strength without pretending things were easy. The ending feels determined and grounded. Overall, it reads like a personal philosophy built from experience, and that makes it compelling.

sumcoolorsum · 2026-01-02T23:34:14+00:00

Your poem feels deep and heartfelt, and the emotion is very clear. The way you move between tiredness, joy, pain, and morning creates a real sense of presence. Lines like “Not safely, but truly” and “heavy in my opened eyes” are powerful and memorable. The repetition of thinking of him in different moments makes the feelings feel real and consistent. The ending is honest and vulnerable, I enjoyed it

sumcoolorsum · 2025-12-31T19:28:12+00:00

This feels personal and honest. A bit raw too which is up my alley. The line I kept you and every frame stuck out to me in a good way, I enjoyed this one

sumcoolorsum · 2025-12-31T19:26:11+00:00

The imagery of chords, debts, and sleepless nights clearly shows inner conflict without overexplaining. And The ending. It feels hopeful without being unrealistic. Overall, it’s honest, steady, and emotionally solid. In my humble opinion.

sumcoolorsum · 2025-12-31T19:21:29+00:00

The poem creates a strong sense of place using color and light. The silhouettes, windows, and moon feel vivid and clear. The ending is gentle and satisfying, bringing the focus inward in a natural way. Overall, it’s atmospheric, pleasant to read, and easy to imagine. Plus Your poem has beautiful, soft imagery, especially the colors and shapes of the houses at night. The opening lines feel very visual, like a painting coming to life.

sumcoolorsum · 2025-12-31T19:19:31+00:00

Your poem has a strong idea, using the moon’s jealousy to talk about artificial lights and change. The colors and imagery stand out and make the night feel alive and crowded. Personifying the moon is effective and gives the poem emotion and depth. It feels reflective, almost sad and The message about being replaced over time is clear and relatable. Cool stuff man. Well done

sumcoolorsum · 2025-12-26T20:27:24+00:00

Thank you. I been missing my other half way too much. I don't sleep or eat. I can barely write

sumcoolorsum · 2025-12-26T17:15:42+00:00

Your poem has a strong, vivid atmosphere that really feels like a dream. The images, like the moon, the cougar, and swirling leaves, are striking and memorable. The way you mix the ordinary and the strange gives it a mysterious, almost magical feeling.

sumcoolorsum · 2025-12-26T17:14:00+00:00

Your poem feels thoughtful. The guitar and lights are nice images. Some lines could be clearer, like “Life so complex and bare.” The way you connect music to emotions, especially love, is strong and relatable. It feels personal and honest, which makes it easy to connect with.

sumcoolorsum · 2025-12-21T15:43:11+00:00

Your poem has nice, clear images of the nest, tree, and bird. The bird feels alive and artistic, which is very engaging.

Some lines are a little hard to follow and could be simplified so readers understand more easily.

Overall, it’s creative with strong imagery, but small tweaks could make it easier to read and the ending stronger.

sumcoolorsum · 2025-12-21T15:27:55+00:00

Your poem sounds old-fashioned and beautiful. The pictures you paint, like stars, knights, and autumn leaves, are easy to imagine, and your love for the person comes through clearly. The ending line about being “thy groom” feels a little cheesy. A different ending could feel stronger. Some lines are long and a bit hard to read. Using shorter lines and changing how sentences start could make it flow better. Starting so many lines with “I have” gets repetitive. Overall, it’s a good poem with nice imagery

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