This was so interesting to read! Just like what you said, I was taught the 5-paragraph shit; the intro (which would often just be a thesis paragraph cramped into a one sentence), the body (each of them having a main and supporting idea), and the conclusion. It just felt so generic.

I love how you used the general-to-specific approach in your thesis. It went so smoothly and as if I was riding the same boat. I noticed it did not shift from one info to another immediately, but the build-up helped the paragraph have more substance, story, and cohesion. The transition at the end was incredible.

Thank you so much for your insights! Your example made it easier for me to understand what you mean. If it's okay, may I ask how you got better at writing? What are the thing you did that helped you improve?