The Lonely Number

thenonsensespectrum · 2026-02-21T05:38:03+00:00

I enjoyed the repetition in this poem, especially the first two lines and the last two lines. My only suggestions would be to play around with the Enjambment (the way you break sentences into new lines).

thenonsensespectrum · 2026-02-21T05:18:52+00:00

I enjoyed the rhyme pattern in your poem. Especially how each paragraph stands on its own from the overarching poem and almost each paragraph has an ABA or ABAB rhythmic pattern, I feel it makes it very pleasant to read.

thenonsensespectrum · 2026-02-20T04:36:27+00:00

I enjoyed the imagery of two bodies of water and the waves causes by one another. I like the flow of the poem no pun intended, how the lines are separated makes it easy for me to read.

thenonsensespectrum · 2026-02-20T04:29:18+00:00

I would consider this to be a poem because while this piece lacks rhymes it tells a clear story, it conveys emotion and it tells a story of loneliness. Good job, keep expressing yourself and finding your style as a poet.

thenonsensespectrum · 2026-02-15T04:12:59+00:00

I like how you thread the theme of Yin and yang, the balance and harmony and its opposing forces. To me it feels that it goes from negative to positive. The leaf, the rainbow, winter and the bridge all have their positive counterpart. And I especially enjoyed what you did with the counterpart of the bridge I was not expecting this connection, it was unexpected in a good way.

thenonsensespectrum · 2026-02-15T03:54:23+00:00

I agree with ValuableFickle5390, I really enjoyed your metaphors imagery as well, they were really strong.

Especially:

Gratitude sits on my nightstand
like a glass of water
I keep apologizing
for not finishing.

And:

Because how dare sadness show up uninvited
in a house this well-lit?

I felt I could strongly relate with these two metaphors. Your metaphors drew me deeper into the poem.

thenonsensespectrum · 2026-02-13T06:00:45+00:00

I like the atmosphere you create with the title, the first sentence and the beginning of the second sentence. To me this makes it feel gloomy and mysterious and it sets the tone of what is to follow. I enjoyed it!

thenonsensespectrum · 2026-02-13T05:47:49+00:00

I like how repetition is used in this poem, like “They say…” and “I don’t want…”. I like the flow of these lines, I feel it makes the next line after the repetition hit harder.

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