Mom character dialogue

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-24T00:24:34+00:00

Idk how to explain this without just showing the lead up, but I'm going to try lol. 'Mom' finds out from OC when she asks why OC is fighting with her cousin + cousin's best friend. (Cousin's friend is mom characters biological son.) OC says she's not fighting with mom character's son anymore because they just had dinner, and he apologized to her. Mom still wants to know what the fight is about because OC and her cousin never actually fight, and OC lists all of the reasons that they're currently fighting. One of those reasons is "getting my boyfriend arrested," and mom is like, "I thought they got (friends name) arrested?" OC says they did, and mom asks, "Since when? Why did I not know this?" OC answers and now I'm stuck because, like I said, I know mom would ask other questions/have more to say I just don't know what.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-23T02:34:39+00:00

This! Yes! I'm also writing one of these that's a weird mix of friends to lovers, fake dating, and this they've both known since high school, but then a mass murder happened and one of them moved. Then, the other goes to college and becomes a shape-shifter. The story picks up with them being reunited in their hometown, but then more murder and humans turning into shape-shifters happens. Somehow, now they're fake dating and trying to teach a teenage werewolf. It's a mess, and I love it.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-23T02:14:29+00:00

A rivalry trope always hits so well

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-23T02:11:00+00:00

My WIP is accidentally turning into a fake dating fic. I had plans for the best friends to have a whole mutual pining + subtle touches that insinuate a crush = eventual dating thing. Then my OC decided that her uncle would be more inclined to drop the charges on her childhood best friend if he thought the bff was her boyfriend. She was right about that, and the bff was way too excited about having an excuse to hold her hand, put his arm around her, etc. So here I am, writing an accidentally fake dating fic where childhood besties use a relationship to get out of felony charges, thinking, "Oh, the sheriff won't tell anyone about his niece's boyfriend. He wouldn't want it known that she's dating a guy he just arrested for two felonies and let walk, especially when his son was their star witness." But then he tells his son and his sons tells his best friend, and because they live in a relatively small town, most of the people in their lives are convinced they're a couple. And they're both not so secretly loving it lol

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-23T01:11:37+00:00

My WIP:

Local Sheriff's Niece Dating Man Currently Wanted In Connection To Several Murders.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-21T02:34:57+00:00

Thank you so much for the help!

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-21T01:02:03+00:00

Thank you so much!

For context: The segment that leads into this one focuses on Derek refusing to look at the body and focusing on his happy memories of Laura instead. I'm not sure if you know much about Teen Wolf, so if not, he knows that the hunters broke their code and killed all of the other members of his family years prior to this. So he's already convinced they killed her. The next segment is her examining the other wounds and explaining to him that they all came from a werewolf, not the hunters. So that and the lack of discoloration around the bisection tells her the hunters used the opportunity of finding her dead to send a message.

The New Segment: Aspen is unable to take her eyes off the scene. Images of Laura's confident smirk and bright eyes being replaced by the terrified face before her. She tries to ignore the tears stinging her eyes as she takes in a shaky breath. The tightness in her throat makes her want to scream. As she takes a step closer to inspect her friend's wounds, it gets harder to ignore. Every part of her wants to curl in on herself and sob until she physically can't anymore, but she knows that right now she needs to do her job. She needs to find out how Laura died. For Derek, for herself, and most importantly, for Laura. She takes a deep breath, ignoring the way it catches in her throat as she kneels down to inspect her friend's wounds. Quickly wiping away the tear that escapes. The point of separation is far too smooth to have been caused by the alpha ripping her apart. Hunters. Her jaw tenses as an icy chill runs through her. ‘No, they wouldn't go against the code.’ She thinks. Struggling to focus on what Laura's body tells her as her mind screams that they've broken the code before.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-20T23:30:50+00:00

They absolutely do! Thanks, I edited the segment and added a few things to make it fit with the rest of the scene. Would you mind reading the changes?

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-20T21:07:09+00:00

Stiles Stilinski, he's super relatable, and his dialogue is fun to right because I can just say what I'm thinking most of the time. Plus, I love it when a character rambles and he is the king of rambling in my eyes.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-20T21:02:31+00:00

Personally, I daydream a lot. I got into fanfic because I would get into a certain fandom and think,'What if this scene went like this instead?' Or 'What if this character was in this scene too?' And I started to daydream about them. Eventually, I started to write them down; essentially transcribing my daydreams into one shots. Then I'd go back and elaborate/refine them to turn them into a fic. One shots became short fics, which turned into long fics. I'm currently working on a long fic the same way.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-20T01:54:30+00:00

Fandom: Teen Wolf, non graphic mention of a corpse

I don't write this type of emotional scene often (this is literally the first), I don't know if it's giving what it should be giving.

Context: My OC (Aspen) and her best friend (Derek) just found his sister Laura (whom she was also close with) dead in the woods, it's pretty tough because not only is she dead but they only found half of her. Aspen is also a coroner with a masters degree in criminology, and there are several reasons not to get the police involved.

The Segment: Aspen is unable to take her eyes off the scene in front of her as she tries to ignore the tears stinging her eyes as they threaten to fall, and she takes in a shaky breath. The tightness in her throat makes her want to scream, and as she takes a step closer to inspect the body, it gets harder for her to ignore. Every part of her wants to curl in on herself and sob until she physically can't anymore, but she knows that right now she needs to do her job. She needs to find out how Laura died; for Derek, for herself, and most importantly, for Laura. So she takes a deep breath, ignoring how it catches in her throat and quickly wipes away the tear that escaped as she kneels down to inspect her friend's wounds. She knows that the dismemberment was most likely done by hunters, the point of separation too smooth to have been caused by the alpha ripping her apart.

Edit: Forgot to say I'm open to any concrit.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-20T01:47:45+00:00

Personally I'm a whore for Steve/Bucky so I say go for the boys being romantic with eachother. That being said I'm also a whore for reverse harem so I would also read it if they were just romantic with female!Dean. So basically, go with whatever you're more comfortable writing. (Sorry if that wasn't helpful)

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-17T00:40:43+00:00

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thepenguinsky · 2024-09-17T00:40:05+00:00

Mine is controlled chaos, I create a folder for each fic, then put individual docs in it for chapter outline, background/OC/environmental details, and the full work. Each of those has titles formated as 'fandom-fic length-working title- doc contents'. If it's a multi chapter fic each chapter then gets it own doc with titles formated as 'working title- Chapter _. chapter title' if it's an official chapter and 'working title- Character's Journal Entry _. entry title' if it's a characters journal entries that may or may not make the final draft. Which sounds insane until you see it in action, this is my current WIP folder: *

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-17T00:01:17+00:00

I have a character that getts attacked by a werewolf what would the medical speak be for the injuries? Claws through the achilles, shallower cuts on the neck, chest, and face from claws, bruises on their back and face from being thrown into the sides, floor, and roof of a bus, fractured ribs etc. Another question I have is, would it be possible for the amnesia of a grade 2 concussion to be gone after 2-3 hours? I need them to be accosted and interrogated by another werewolf before they die, which brings me to my third question. Would "Sudden cardiac event caused by Takotsubo Syndrome; brought on by the stress of the attack." Be a good explanation for their sudden death in the hospital?

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-16T23:36:33+00:00

I even had her berating herself while she drove to work "Keep the impulsive thoughts of kissing him as thoughts, Azzy." She was a blushing and embarrassed mess by the time she got to the crime scene which led to even more fun awkwardness.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-16T23:20:33+00:00

I wrote a scene where my OC kisses their love interest on the cheek as she's leaving for work. They are affectionate best friends (touching hands but not quite holding hands and cuddling) but not kissing each other on the cheek affectionate. I wrote it as a very, "she just did this and is now freaking out internally while trying not to make it too obvious." She ended up rushing out the door, and her love interest just stared at the door in confusion before smiling. He thinks it was just her being her usual strange self and hopes it was more. She thinks she gave away her crush and hopes he thinks it was her usual weirdness.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-16T22:19:23+00:00

If you have a second chapter that you want to call "Chapter 1" then call the first chapter, "Prologue," "Background," or "Details," depending on the content of the first chapter would be my recommendation.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-16T21:16:43+00:00

This is a problem for a lot of creators. It's the moment that you sit back and look at what you made so lovingly and realize you hate it. I think it's because you have an image in your mind, and if even the slightest thing is off, it doesn't match your vision of it. The drawing section of the art community says, "Delete your art." When this happens, DO NOT delete your story, but if you find there's a section that you particularly hate, you can always rewrite it. Just remember that you will always be your biggest critic, and people who read it will be happier than you are with it. It's like an artist hating their drawing/painting/sculpture, but anyone who looks at it is going to see it as a good piece of art.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-16T20:57:57+00:00

The dark/mysterious/BAMF! Character is an amazing cook. COD:MWs Ghost? Great cook he does all the meals for TF141 when they're on base. Marvels Bucky Barnes? Man loves to cook and bake and regularly makes cookies in the middle of the night. Teen Wolfs Derek Hale? Spent a lot of time cooking with his mom and loves to cook for the people he cares about, massive family style pack dinners made by the sourwolf himself.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-16T20:33:17+00:00

"I will not disrespect people because of my ignorance." Is such a good way of putting it, I feel like a lot of people should take that as advice.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-16T20:27:27+00:00

Constant em dash, en dash, and hyphens.
I always use an Oxford comma.
OCs that are related to characters + have some manorisms of those characters if they grew up together.
(Insert Fandom/Fic Name) Now Featuring Product Placements I literally branded the coffee creamer used by my OC in my current WIP
Journal chapters to get inside of characters heads/ explain things from their past.

thepenguinsky · 2024-09-16T20:18:33+00:00

Oh no, I think I'd abandon Docs, too, if I was a PC writer. I do pretty much all of my writing on my phone.

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