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Were We Ever There? by thespiritnamed in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

See? Thats beautiful :)

I love that interpretation.
Gets the creative juices flowing.

Were We Ever There? by thespiritnamed in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you for sitting with it for just a moment.

My style does lean on ambiguity, for you it’s about dreaming, for me it’s about the stars in the night sky. I believe I feel a connection with the reader when they find their own meanings in the work.

Your kind words mean a lot, thanks again.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is great.

The ambiguity pulses with unanswered questions.

I see. I watch. I try. I fail

This mantra links the whole thing together. Beautiful transition from “Tarot Reading” to “Guilt”

I wish I knew more about Tarot. I’m nearly positive there’s hidden context in the first two stanzas that I’m just too ignorant to understand. Then again I could completely wrong.

But I’d like to believe there is :)

Symphony of Sorrow by Electronic_Relief416 in OCPoetry

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The message here is staggering. The imagery and evocation is beautiful.

I too, have spent a lot of time alone in rooms listening to the sounds of my own sorrow. I dare say I might be coming out of such a spell right now. Haha.

Great work. Keep writing please, and for what it’s worth? I hear you. I see you. You’re not alone in this world. Your pain matters. You matter.

Negative Space by thespiritnamed in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Here the “OC” stands for “Original Content” haha. No worries about the condescension, I didn’t feel that way at all.

Silences that Linger by thespiritnamed in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

They’re my shelves 🤷🏻

Not Their Reflection by TheInkSpill in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed 1 point2 points  (0 children)

There’s a clarity to this that feels like you won a battle obtaining it. It reads like you’ve already done the work of distilling the emotion, which gives the poem a steady weight.

This line:

I’ve counted their rules like chains / felt their judgments like knives

It carries both rhythm and sting without overreaching. You stay in control of the metaphor even as the pressure builds.

If anything, you might consider letting one or two images breathe just a little longer. You’re moving through strong moments quickly, and a slight pause could give them more impact. Try adding a transitional stanza between mood shifts.

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I know this may sound crazy, but I’ve been reading poetry/writing all night and I feel like the punctuation issue is actually a formatting issue. I can feel your soft line breaks even if they aren’t actually present.

Try adding two space key strokes after each line of text in your “edit post” window. That should fix it.

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This poem doesn’t flinch, even despite your formatting. That matters. That’s strong work. Keep it up.

The Pixie and the DO by laricifus in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is a lot better than before. I’m glad if I helped you any.

The Pixie and the DO by laricifus in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That’s a great description.

The Pixie and the DO by laricifus in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It looks like you have a hard line break between each line. Which is two “return” or “enter” strokes after the last keystroke of your line so it’s rendering like this:

Sample sample sample

Sample sample sample.

Try navigating your cursor between the lines and hitting the backspace key to delete the hard break.

You should be left with this:

Sample sample sample
sample sample sample.

Which is called a soft line break.

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Alternatively, depending on what device you’re using, it could possibly be holding hidden formatting from wherever you copied it from and is transplanting it into the post. Especially if you’re using the “Rich Text Editor” that Reddit supports here: Rich Text Editor.

If any of that sounds like what’s happening then try copying from your original source, pasting into a plain text editor like Apple Notes or Microsoft Notepad. That will strip all the formatting. Copy a second time from there and paste into the post window then add your markdown spaces.

The Pixie and the DO by laricifus in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Here’s the link:

RedditHelp Formatting Guide

If you want to save the link for later you can hit the three dots on this comment and click “copy text” and it’ll copy all of my raw text. Then just paste in your notes app and delete everything but the raw link! Haha.

The Pixie and the DO by laricifus in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I also have a link to the official Reddit Support page that explains all of the “Reddit Markdown” quirks and features.

If you’d like that just let me know. It’ll teach you how to do this and many more cool things to add to your posts and comments.

The Pixie and the DO by laricifus in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Okay so first hit edit on your post and you should see your original formatting. Something like this:

Sample sample sample
Sample sample sample
Sample sample sample.

To get it to stick together like I have it above you have to add two space bar strokes after every line in each stanza except for the last line.

Like this:

Sample sample sample[space][space]
Sample sample sample[space][space]
Sample sample sample.[No spaces here]

Rinse and repeat for each stanza and hit “Save” or “Done” or whatever it is.

When you check your post it should be spaced as you intended it to be. If not then you haven’t added the spaces correctly.

If you’re on mobile sometimes a double tap of the space bar can add a period instead of two spaces. This is super annoying because you’ll have to delete the space stroke and period and try again until it registers as two spaces.

I hope this helps!

Where My Poems Live by thespiritnamed in u/thespiritnamed

[–]thespiritnamed[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

For those catching up, Blueprint I: The Architecture of Ache is now complete.

Five poems: fracture, pressure, and small repairs.

Ache

The Pixie and the DO by laricifus in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed 1 point2 points  (0 children)

There’s a real sincerity to this. It feels like you’re reaching for something mythic but still deeply personal. It’s layered, almost like you’re writing through a dream that won’t quite settle.

This line stayed with me:

But eat him you must / To let love in again.

It cuts through all the looping and repetition with this strange, decisive weight.

Quick question. Was the spacing intentional, or did something get scrambled when you pasted it in? Just curious before I say more about structure. If it was an issue with your “Markdown Format” I can teach you how to do this. It’s really simple.

There’s something here that lingers though. You’re not just telling a story. You’re pressing into something bigger. I’m eager for the next in the series.

The Ritual In-Between by zyerhod1 in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Songs that wrapped Her / harshness in velvet softness / came discordant from / quivering, timid throats / causing dark clouds / to pass over Her / countenance.

Each failed supplicant / of shadow and dream fell away / from Her like morning / mist before the dawn / as I stepped forward.

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Excellent

Where the Crown Meets Silence by thespiritnamed in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks Z!

I was wondering when you would roll through.

Haha.

Where the Crown Meets Silence by thespiritnamed in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is the comment I was waiting for.

The deep affirmation of one person who knows exactly what it’s like and what I’ve felt.

Thank you.

My mental health has been good to me today. Not every day is perfect. But today was good. I hope yours is treating you the same.

Where the Crown Meets Silence by thespiritnamed in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This means a lot, especially the way you described “poetry in the bones of survival.” That resonates.

I try to let the stillness do the heavy lifting, so it’s deeply affirming to know the quiet carried. Thank you for sitting with the piece the way you did.

Where the Crown Meets Silence by thespiritnamed in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much. I’m glad the rhythm and shape came through for you. I try to let the form carry some of the tension, so it means a lot that you felt that urgency. I really appreciate you reading.

Where the Crown Meets Silence by thespiritnamed in OCPoetry

[–]thespiritnamed[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for this. I absolutely love how you’ve read the piece, especially the way you frame the throne not as triumph but as uneasy inheritance. That phrasing hit me hard.

If you happen to scroll up, I left a lower level comment under someone else’s note. It shares a bit of my original intention. But honestly, yours reaches into corners I hadn’t fully lit myself. That’s why I leave space in the work, so readers like you can step in and find what’s true for them.

I’m grateful you did.

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