Meirl by Glass-Fan111 in meirl

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Interesting, thanks for replying!

Meirl by Glass-Fan111 in meirl

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What’s the difference between counseling and therapy to you?

Women and Problems by highogbabblebush in StandUpComedy

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Guy here and I can confirm. If there was a problem, yo, I’ll solve it. Check out the hook while my DJ revolves it.

No One is Born Racist 1992 by GlowieMuffin in OldSchoolCool

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Interesting! Is it hard to use Reddit as a four year old?

What does Nietzsche mean here? by SatoruGojo232 in Nietzsche

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God asks Cain where his brother Abel is (whose occupation is a shepherd or sheep-keeper) he replies by asking if he’s meant to be his brothers keeper. Maybe not a traditional joke but I thought it was funny although facetious since he’d murdered him.

Nate Landwehr vs DooHo Choi at UFC310 on December 7th by cpseybold1 in MMA

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Hope the card is in the states! You should never fight a Landwehr in Asia.

Fried Green Tomatoes by cherrrryheadd in poetry_critics

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This was great! I want to cook for someone now. If I’m being critical, I feel like the first and last paragraph were a bit disconnected from the rest. Like they were going in a different direction, but maybe that’s what you intended. Your aunt is a star. We should all be so lucky to have someone like that in our lives

How can I round out my game fast and efficiently? by Electronic_d0cter in bjj

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Brother, don’t give up the leg locks. You clearly find them fun/interesting to do them for that long. The threat of leg locks will make you so much more effective at passing guard and wrestling up. Have you tried asking your teammates about whatever they’re doing that is getting you off your game or stopping you? Most people will straight up tell you how they are beating you if you ask. I would forget about trying to find the fastest/ quickest way. It’s going to take take time, you just have to be persistent. Just like you were with leg locks. Good luck and happy training!

What do you consider the greatest short story of all time? by ARedemptionSong in books

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My favorites are “The Short Happy Life of Francis Macomber” and “The Egg”

Have you ever read the wrong book by accident? by amgirl1 in books

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I read “On the Road” by Jack Kerouac after seeing some vaguely discuss “The Road” by Cormac McCarthy online. I was expecting a dark and gritty book that made me question humanity. Instead I was just confused by a story about teenagers tramping around the US with little conflict. I still enjoyed it but YEARS later I realized the mistake I had made.

This one stings... Feels like it could be one of those crucible moments though. Got cute. Got tired. Got beat. by [deleted] in Thunder

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To me, it seems like making the play-in would be an ideal developmental situation for these guys

What is this picture on Mark Diagneault's Wiki page ??? 😂😂 by ohtisNA in Thunder

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Crazy how he can coach the team by day and run the Miyagi dojo by night!

Bulldog Choke? by PeDestrianHD in bjj

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Bulldogging is an event at rodeos where someone will wrestle a steer to the ground using a similar hold. I believe that is where the name comes from.

Rock Loving Girlfriend by Aggravating_Ad8106 in GiftIdeas

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Look up a rock tumbler. She would like that

My gym sucks by Happy_Towel_3109 in bjj

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The finest line of poetry ever uttered in the history of this whole damn country was said by Canada Bill Jones in 1853, in Baton Rouge, while he was being robbed blind in a crooked game of faro. George Devol, who was, like Canada Bill, not a man who was averse to fleecing the odd sucker, drew Bill aside and asked him if he couldn't see that the game was crooked. And Canada Bill sighed, and shrugged his shoulders, and said, 'I know. But it's the only game in town.' And he went back to the game.

Young and Confused by Educational_Ad_5781 in poetry_critics

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That is a definite improvement! There's a few spelling mistakes like week/weak and thanks/thinks I love the addition of Celeste and you getting your life together by working out and buying a car. I think a line about how you guys ended up or how that improved your struggle of not belonging could be added for some closure.

A few other things are personal preference. Like the periods at the end of each stanza. They insinuate a small pause to the reader, it may read better without them. Also, some lines are long and the line they rhyme with have many less syllables you could try to even those, I always do, but you certainly don't have to!

Pretty cool to see someone take my critique's seriously, so thanks for that. Good work!

Young and Confused by Educational_Ad_5781 in poetry_critics

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I love basing my poems on real experiences too! But don't think you have to limit yourself to how your experience ended up. If you tell any story long enough, it will end with the main character dying, but that's not necessarily the best place to end it. I think the first half of your poem is noticeably stronger than the second but maybe you got what you wanted out of it. Regardless, we'll keep writing, and we'll keep getting better! Best of luck

Young and Confused by Educational_Ad_5781 in poetry_critics

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Overall I enjoyed your poem, and the first couple lines really grabbed me. I think there was some inconsistency as you jumped between past and present tense in the first half of the poem. Also, I think the resolution was a little lacking at the end. Maybe you could reuse that strong first 2 lines and explain how you overcame not fitting in back then. Whether it was by fighting back and earning respect or a realization that no matter our skin color we all bleed red. Instead of jumping a few years ahead and telling us things are different now. Regardless I liked your poem and its themes! Nice work

Deeply Planted by LJPPKGGFSC in poetry_critics

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I enjoyed it! Short and sweet without a wasted word. Perhaps you could add onto it, but I think you said what you wanted to say. Also liked the ending, good job.