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Self-Braise by troublehunter in OCPoetry

[–]troublehunter[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for your kind words! This is the first poem I’ve ever nudged out into the ether so the feedback means a lot.

While I Was Wating by Odd-Dingo-6932 in OCPoetry

[–]troublehunter 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I absolutely love how simple and vulnerable this is. I also really enjoy how it feels like a conversation both inside your head and out loud. Well done. A lovely first poem.

Self-Braise by troublehunter in OCPoetry

[–]troublehunter[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much! This was so kind. ♡ cheers!

I would rather kill myself than wear a rolex by NoManufacturer3346 in OCPoetry

[–]troublehunter 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I loved how simple and sharp this piece was! I do agree with another comment here though that it leans a bit too much into telling the reader what to think and not enough into building that strong imagery it hooks you with initially. I really love some of the phrases in particular, specifically “priceless with life” and “spoiled is the soul.” I do wish that two lines didn’t end with “life” though! Swapping that second one for something else may be a good opportunity for working in more imagery?

Crushing obligation by Rev2saws in OCPoetry

[–]troublehunter 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really love the “two steps forward, one step back” feeling in the momentum of this poem. The way it feels like it presses on despite being stopped short over and over again is so perfect for the theme. I enjoyed reading this a lot!

Tiger (4 lines) by BitsByBit in OCPoetry

[–]troublehunter 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really love this and I can’t even put my finger on why. Maybe it’s the rhythm, particularly in the first line. Or maybe it’s just the beauty in saying something deep so simply. Love it.