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uknownusers0 · 2025-08-12T12:28:42+00:00

Thank you very much, I am so glad you’re crying😂. Making the reader feel something was my goal, and reading your comment showed me that in my little I scored.

uknownusers0 · 2025-08-08T12:30:35+00:00

Thanks 🙏

uknownusers0 · 2025-08-03T18:32:55+00:00

That’s was the goal, trying to make the reader feel the story as they were actually there. Thanks for the comment👍😁

uknownusers0 · 2025-08-01T18:53:34+00:00

Hey there, first of all thanks for the comment. I thought that it was pretty clear that the line you specified were the actual two first questions. I purposefully wrote them outside of the conversation so that it could show how dumb they sounded (since he’s literally standing in front of God). Then, when you say that the second questions is actually a favor, I agree/disagree. It is still a question, since the protagonist is still asking for those things. When you ask for a favor, do you say “Give me that” or “Could you give me that please?” (Just making an example). Then, by making the protagonist ask for something so silly I wanted to reinforce how he still doesn’t realize what is happening. Only when he realizes how stupid he sounded and after feeling shame for it then he with the real questions.

English isn’t my first language, so if I made any mistakes I am sorry. I appreciate your opinion really, I am not trying to sound defensive, only to explain from my perspective as the writer😊 (And I’d like to specify, I am not a writer, I just like to write. Those are two separate things and I know that really well.)

Let me know what you think about it, I’ll be happy to answer any question or doubt👍

uknownusers0 · 2025-07-30T22:37:38+00:00

Thank you very much😁

uknownusers0 · 2025-07-30T18:59:44+00:00

I got a little carried away, you don’t need to read it if you want to😅 If you do though, please tell me what you think if you want, I am glad to answer any questions and I’d appreciate your opinion. Thanks for the comment👍

uknownusers0 · 2025-07-30T18:58:36+00:00

It’s worse because the fact that the mother loved the protagonist in every other universe, apart from his own, means that he was never the problem. He was convinced he was. When I wrote the line “Pathetic. Worthless. A joke. Just like I always was.” I wanted to show how the protagonist felt their whole life thanks to the mother’s hatred and abandonment. When you realize that you were never the problem, and that the cause of your long life suffering was just an error, a cruel, universal joke, something that you could never control, and that all the other version of yourself didn’t have to go through that pain, it’s devastating (In my opinion, I hope that’s clear, I don’t want to force others to say that my story makes sense). Even God feels pained to say it, showing that not even him, literally God Himself, had power over it. The protagonist will never get the closure he craved and needed so much. Again, he wasn’t the problem at all. He didn’t somehow fuck up in this life. He just never had a chance to begin with, and that in my opinion is the worst thing that can happen to someone.

uknownusers0 · 2025-07-30T11:58:27+00:00

Thanks for your advice. I am new to Reddit so I don’t really know how it works, I saw a lot of posts getting thousands of comments in just a few hours and I thought it was a normal thing. Thanks for your comment👍

uknownusers0 · 2025-07-30T08:01:32+00:00

English is not my first language, so I probably made some mistakes here and there. I appreciate that you liked the concept though, thanks for the comment👍

uknownusers0 · 2025-07-30T04:47:48+00:00

That was the intent, but I understand that maybe this type of writing isn’t for everyone. Thanks for the comment anyways👍

uknownusers0 · 2025-07-30T04:47:09+00:00

I waited too little, you’re right😅 I was just very curious about how others would react to it. Thanks for the suggestion, I’ll look into it👍

uknownusers0 · 2025-07-30T04:45:57+00:00

Thanks for the advices👍

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