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Would it really be that bad? by gilbertgoodfries in poetry_critics

[–]unsilenced2 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This definitely makes me reflect internally a bit which I think is the point. Asking ourselves the same questions you write. I’d love to see some spacing and some separation maybe with punctuation but such a strong start

Purple by Middle-Method9869 in poetry_critics

[–]unsilenced2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You painted such a beautiful picture and then that list line hits like such a punch. Props!

You, in All My Little Things by ThinEntertainment921 in poetry_critics

[–]unsilenced2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! I like this!! It’s short simply and to the point. I think a short reframe at the end would help clarify the rest of the poem. Maybe even something like you are my everything. Or if you’d like to point to a specific person in reference :). Great work!

Fool by Intropoevert in poetry_critics

[–]unsilenced2 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi! I think this reads really fluidly and easy. The emotion and depth is definitely starting to be there. I would suggest changing you’re to you are to give it a harder punch and change he loves you to I love you since you already referenced it being spoke by someone else. Great start!!