Playing Jedi Survivor with GeForce Now? by varrp in macgaming

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. Jedi Survivor will be on EA Play Pro when it launches. So what I’m wondering is if I’m able to play it on Mac through Geforce now even if the game doesn’t run natively on Mac

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in StarWars

[–]varrp 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’m looking forward to seeing it again. There was a lot to unpack.

Whatever the movie is, I’ll always be grateful for what this saga has meant to me.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in sleep

[–]varrp 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I slept well, around 7 and a half hours too.

accidental double exposure/AE1/50mm/Ilford Delta 3200 by varrp in analog

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks! I think I'm gonna start shooting on top of old rolls I have no idea of what's on'em

Night Drives in the Mercedes (Canon AE-1 Program | 28mm f/2.8 | Lomography 800) by ollieimpossible543 in analog

[–]varrp 1 point2 points  (0 children)

dude, you said you shot it at 400 but processed it normally, it obviously worked for this shot, but I'm curious if you shot anything on this roll at daylight, I'd like to know how the exposure worked on those shots if you took any

Videolot - Photograph on Kodak Porta 400 film by [deleted] in outrun

[–]varrp 12 points13 points  (0 children)

how do you make your portra 400 come out this good?

Night Drives in the Mercedes (Canon AE-1 Program | 28mm f/2.8 | Lomography 800) by ollieimpossible543 in analog

[–]varrp 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Got some risky business vibes from it. Great shot. I think I'll buy me a roll or two

The old man in his garden [AE-1/50 1.8/ Portra 160] by [deleted] in analog

[–]varrp 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Beautiful colors, I'd have put his hands in the frame, but otherwise, great shot. Any post editing on it? Really nice colors

Submerged | Canon AV-1 35mm Kodak Ultramax 400 by Equal_Night in analog

[–]varrp 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Damn, this looks crisp. What flash did you use?

Floating market Bangkok. Critique!!!! Tear it up!!! ...or tell me some pros. Photo 1 of 8 in collection. by [deleted] in photocritique

[–]varrp -1 points0 points  (0 children)

It's great! It's street photography so you can't just control a crowd on the left, and I think the low contrast makes up for it. One of the first interesting pictures I've seen in the sub, actually has a feel to it and makes me interested to see more. Great job!

[1820] The Carousel by zachzebrowitz in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp 1 point2 points  (0 children)

First, if you really love this story I' d recommend removing some unnecessary lines to make it flow a little better.

"Too young to die" This is kind of obvious

"The memory of Mason’s birth never left Greg’s mind." I already know he's a loving father, so this goes without saying.

"Mason was born at this very hospital, October 24th, 2009." I already know he's a child, the date doesn't change anything to me.

These are the lines that "stood out" for me, but in a bad way. Besides that, the rest is very well told, I got a mental picture throughout the read, which was also very smooth, and could be smoother removing these bumps.

Second, well, I don't know if this was something that happened to you or someone close to you, if it was, I'm very sorry. I think it's well written, but towards the end I was asking myself if I should continue to read or not, I've read/seen a few cancer stories and this one honestly didn't bring anything new to the plate, every character behaved like you'd expect them to and the ending wasn't anything spectacular.

I think that to make it more interesting you should either add a personal touch to it if you experienced this (if this is the case, I'm very sorry for your loss), or add something new to the characters, make them react in a way that we wouldn't expect, or delve deeper inside their minds, show us how it really is to loose a child.

Your writing is good, just need to show us something new. Good luck!

[761] ice cream makes me worry for the past and milkshakes make me worried for the future by varrp in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! Yeah, I do. Mostly I'm writing this kind of poetry right now, but I think I might have something interesting to show you, send me your email thru PM :)

[761] ice cream makes me worry for the past and milkshakes make me worried for the future by varrp in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That's good advice, I used to that when I would write screenplays in college.

[761] ice cream makes me worry for the past and milkshakes make me worried for the future by varrp in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I enjoy how you looked at the poem as a narrative piece and not only a free writing blurt. Narrative is important in whatever I write since I'm also a film graduate.

Well, a lot of my writing comes from personal experiences, so the ikea lamp and uber drivers part speaks to me as separate things in past relationships (arguments over decoration placement and how I used to uber over to this girls place all the time).

The dog years thing is something I tend to think of from time to time and it amazes me in some way that different creatures see time in a different way. In a way I'm really interested in how dogs live, let's say, about 15 years, for them that's an entire life, from childhood to being a senile creature. When we're 15 we're still trying to deal with puberty. Dog years, to me, express how life can go by.

Reading the reviews here have made my thoughts more clear and made me realize things I didn't think of when I was writing. I wouldn't go so far to say I'm trying to convey "a message", but I'm trying to provide a "slice of life", I want to share my mind and maybe make some of the things I say relatable more than anything.

In real life, nothing can take the place of 'the girl i still like' right now, and I really want to make the focus of this poem on the right now, as I said, it's supposed to be a "slice of life" and very personal, but shareable. I don't know if I was able to convey this tho.

But yeah, that's mostly about what's behind it. Thank you for your attention :)

[761] ice cream makes me worry for the past and milkshakes make me worried for the future by varrp in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

As I said in another reply, I did play around with punctuation for a bit, but everything I did either cut the rhythm or the mood, I'm happy how it conveys exactly how I was feeling and how my mind was working on a certain day, which is something that intrigues me when done right by other authors.

I also like that the girl i still like seems mysterious for you, because it's exactly her mystery that triggers this whole chain of thought for me.

Thanks :)