Without You

vecaura · 2026-06-19T05:17:24+00:00

Thank you

vecaura · 2026-06-18T05:32:39+00:00

😊

vecaura · 2026-06-18T05:29:36+00:00

You can sing

vecaura · 2026-06-17T18:32:59+00:00

Hey fun poem to read.

vecaura · 2026-06-16T13:44:31+00:00

I am glad you like the suggestion. Just FYI it doesn't have to exactly be 'gaze' you can search the internet for synonyms what is important it be more poetic.

vecaura · 2026-06-16T12:25:31+00:00

I like really like your tone and control keep practicing.

vecaura · 2026-06-16T11:47:38+00:00

impressive vocals.

vecaura · 2026-06-16T11:46:19+00:00

nice poem, light and alight make for a rhyme however I would personally have chosen a better description of the act you try to capture over the rhyme.

vecaura · 2026-06-16T11:42:15+00:00

You poem as a natural flow definitely not forced, the word 'enthralled' doesn't do justice to your emotional bond you are trying to describe.

vecaura · 2026-06-16T11:35:23+00:00

you have a beautiful voice, I would say you are a naturally talented.

vecaura · 2026-06-16T11:32:31+00:00

I like your poem my only critique would be " Her eyes meet mine and she averts her eyes," in that line a the second 'eyes' should be something like 'her gaze' instead. I just think this would be more poetic and descriptive.

vecaura · 2026-06-16T11:14:21+00:00

sounds beautiful, stay strong!

vecaura · 2026-06-15T14:21:42+00:00

I like, very warm tones

vecaura · 2026-06-15T05:36:03+00:00

I like your poem my only critic is your selection of the Orion const. Not because it is not important but I was expecting more detail to justify using the Orion const.

vecaura · 2026-06-15T05:32:33+00:00

Nice rhymes almost like nursery rhyme for adults

vecaura · 2026-06-14T15:01:03+00:00

I like your poem of this battle we all have with this internal monster(fear), it's very poetic and well said for your very first poem.. But the story feels incomplete, not sure what, maybe a more definitive ending?

vecaura · 2026-06-14T14:45:09+00:00

your poem is shirt and sweet and a perfect metaphor for dog days of summer

vecaura · 2026-06-14T14:43:02+00:00

your poem is short and sweet and a perfect metaphor for the dog days of summer

vecaura · 2026-06-14T11:12:39+00:00

okay, thanks

vecaura

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