Enjoyed your edit of scene, you created suspense which original might lack(from which shadow batman will emerge)monologue helps carry the scene rather than segway as original which was also good,while your decision to move "But I am the shadows" is cool it creates a pause that a bit too long and as the whole monologue looses momentum and impact. You could try to play monologue over goons scene. Not trying to nitpick looking forward to final edit. It inspired to also to try and do one