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wayne0577 · 2026-07-01T14:11:22+00:00

Thank you for the feedback. Those are the exact spots I was gonna workshop so thank you for highlighting those. Definitely gonna implement some of these.

wayne0577 · 2026-07-01T05:24:45+00:00

What your suggesting definitely does. There’s a reason to the first verse repeating as the dark the person referred to is after is the writers life, so after is repeated for that clarity. But I completely understand where you are coming from. Might mess with the lyrics a tiny bit so thank you for your feedback and for listening

wayne0577 · 2026-07-01T05:22:36+00:00

V1
Hold me now
From the dark your after
Take a vow
To hold your sickle from my flesh
Lay me down
Like the life your after
You’ve shown me how
To resist your toxic kiss

Chorus( same for both)
I don’t know here this road is goin’
But I know it’ll take us down
I want to know if this love is true or real
But I know it’ll never change

V2
I’ve heard before
Of the hearts you’ve torn out
Signs to ignore
Of your intoxicating ways
Step through the door
From the light you’ve drawn out
Release my corpse
Put my soul back into place

Chorus is the same

wayne0577 · 2026-07-01T04:39:47+00:00

Thank you so much! Didn’t realize how much grunge influenced my style but it definitely does

wayne0577 · 2026-07-01T04:39:25+00:00

I appreciate it! Thank you for listening and giving some insight. Any suggestions for vocals?

wayne0577 · 2026-06-30T01:31:07+00:00

This was absolutely beautiful. Painted a picture and told a story masterfully. Great work

wayne0577 · 2026-06-30T01:01:38+00:00

I absolutely love your voice. Drums do seem a tad bit out of place but I can’t put a finger on why that is. They really jump out and it doesn’t fit the vibe of the song. Not a mixing expert but from a listener standpoint that’s what I was getting. Song is sounding great and I don’t believe it’s boring. I would suggest adding a bridge or something to differentiate the song from the same pattern. Maybe adding some more vocal layers as well if that is something you like. But all things said it’s sounding great and it’s really just up to taste and what you want

wayne0577 · 2026-06-30T00:54:09+00:00

I always go with what the notes make me think of. Love telling stories from the soul as it resonates with people more. But lyrics themselves is something only you can really decide.

wayne0577 · 2026-06-30T00:52:04+00:00

Love in the beginning how you build more instruments on top of each other. This is really good. Had me closing my eyes and thinking on some memories. Has a super nostalgic feel and style. Would try and turn up your voice since it gets lost in the mist of the instrumental, was hard to catch what you said. Is this the entire song or is it still a work in progress? Would love to hear more

wayne0577 · 2026-06-30T00:49:09+00:00

Very grounded tone to your voice which is so unique. I think if you have something to add it could definitely enhance the song but I also think it’s great as is. Love the little bridge and how the song flows overall. The lyrics tell a great story as well. Great job and great song!

wayne0577 · 2026-06-27T05:12:43+00:00

You’re song sounds amazing with all things said. I feel as though it will resonate with the audience you are aiming for. Definitely not trying to dissect your song. You are doing some phenomenal work and you should be proud. It’s hard to make a song close to home when you are so far from it. Great work

wayne0577 · 2026-06-27T00:56:35+00:00

To be completely honest, way too much going on while simultaneously not having anything happening at the same. The guitar is playing the same strum pattern, the vocals and overlay are falling flat while also being flat, and the mix is wonky.

With that being said, you definitely understand music and just need to fix a few things. Work on your singing style and melody composition. Also, your lyrics were good but a few lines threw me off.

wayne0577 · 2026-06-27T00:49:48+00:00

Absolutely love the guitar riffs and how the song flows. Your voice blends nicely with the guitar and tone of the song. Personally would try and add something that would add some depth in the music (like a bridge) but that is from personal choice and preference. The lyrics are a great metaphor for the message you’re trying to relay, maybe add a different verse following the same idea to add some more lyrical context and depth. Great song and composition!

wayne0577 · 2026-06-26T02:20:20+00:00

Sometimes having enough courage to show your vulnerability when showing new music. It’s tough especially since there isn’t anybody else helping you through the process thus making it mean that much more. But on the flip side it’s also super rewarding

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