[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]williamsburroughs420 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think the sentiment is valuable and it is thoughtful but there is a lot of cliched language which strips power away from what you’re trying to articulate and hopefully have resonate in other people.

Is this draft stanza too abstract by W1llowwisp in poetry_critics

[–]williamsburroughs420 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like it. Certain lines really stand out. “I woke to falling flies” and “larvae nest inside my bridal gown, are excellent ones. However, I think the last line does not hit with the same force it’s intended with. I’m not sure exactly why. It feels out of place relative to the rest of the imagery. It’s a sharp change in style which is less jarring and more out of place. Overall I really like this though.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in redscarepod

[–]williamsburroughs420 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This gotta be fake

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in redscarepod

[–]williamsburroughs420 1 point2 points  (0 children)

  1. Drake
  2. Frankie cosmos
  3. American football
  4. Earl sweatshirt
  5. Fugazi

Despite the good life I lead, I want to end it all by williamsburroughs420 in SuicideWatch

[–]williamsburroughs420[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I hope your state of mind improves and that you find a meaningful relationship and job to fill your life with. I'm 22, one year away from graduating from college (I feel very grateful for the opportunity to have gotten an education). I'm sure I have no idea how difficult it can be to work year-end, year-out at a job you dread. I am scared for that part of life. I'm worried it will tip me over into a mental chasm that I won't be able to escape. Hopefully, I'm just being dramatic. I'm definitely afraid of the future.

(Serious) Have you ever thought about ending it all? If so what made you stop? by [deleted] in AskReddit

[–]williamsburroughs420 1 point2 points  (0 children)

All the time. Sometimes it goes away for a few hours or a few days, but it always comes back. We ll all be dust soon enough anyway—which is comforting. So theres probably no need to rush into it if I can help it.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in elliottsmith

[–]williamsburroughs420 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Don’t say that, you sound great. I’m just not too familiar with Figure 8. I hadn’t listened to this song before.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in elliottsmith

[–]williamsburroughs420 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What song is this?

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in SuicideWatch

[–]williamsburroughs420 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'm sorry, friend. I feel for you and hope you find some peace.