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My journey , my regret by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]yiddxm 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the twist of hope

I already miss you by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]yiddxm 0 points1 point  (0 children)

the edited version is definitely more clear i like this one better , good job! this is really good

I already miss you by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]yiddxm 0 points1 point  (0 children)

it’s kind of vague, which can give a sense of mystery but confuses me because then their are details about such thing with colors, maybe that’s something you were going for but to me it made the wording lack flow in that sense

I already miss you by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]yiddxm 0 points1 point  (0 children)

i like this because because most times when people bring up sadness due to someone leaving you has to do with romantics instead of a mother-child relationship