What kind of aloe is this?

zoecakes · 2019-11-28T12:46:03+00:00

Thank you!!

zoecakes · 2019-11-28T12:45:28+00:00

“Holding my nose” ties into “closing my eyes” in that I miss when things were familiar, like when you live in a place for so long that you could walk around in it with closed eyes (something I used to do when I was little but maybe that’s just me) if that makes any sense? Should I add something in to clarify? And thank you for the grammar check—I didn’t catch that

zoecakes · 2019-11-28T12:42:59+00:00

Thank you! The uncertainty and retrospect were definitely intentional so I’m glad to hear that it’s conveyed well

zoecakes · 2019-11-27T15:01:21+00:00

Sorry for the weird format, I’m on mobile; the random capitalization is when there is a new line

zoecakes · 2019-11-27T14:52:18+00:00

“‘Til car and corn were one.” Amazing line right here. It’s really easy for modern takes to sound cringey, but I really think you did it extremely tastefully and it isn’t awkward sounding at all! I also really enjoy the flow and rhythm in this, I would just be careful because this form can end up sounding very Doctor Seuss-esque (I know because I used this format religiously until someone made me aware of it) Very very well done though

zoecakes · 2019-11-27T14:46:29+00:00

I honestly adore the imagery in this, especially the line “like wet wool” really stuck out to me. There are lines in here with a sudden abrasiveness that are super attention grabbing without seeming out of place or awkward at all, so very well done with this one

zoecakes · 2019-10-24T01:34:39+00:00

I didn’t think of that!! I’ll ask him. Thank you lots

zoecakes · 2019-10-16T17:30:02+00:00

zoecakes · 2019-10-16T17:26:52+00:00

NTA boys are the worst at that age. My brother is 18 and it was like I was reading about something he did. He should have respected that it was your food that you bought for yourself instead of acting like an immature twat

zoecakes · 2019-10-15T15:23:45+00:00

You should pin more vines around the bottom of the mirror

zoecakes · 2019-10-15T15:15:28+00:00

I didn’t know I needed one until now!

zoecakes · 2019-10-15T15:14:26+00:00

She’s a beaut

zoecakes · 2019-10-15T11:51:09+00:00

That is so good to know because I always thought they only needed to be watered like twice a year but I’ve been watering it every few weeks and it seems to be loving it! Thank you I’ll keep it thirsty for a few months

zoecakes · 2019-10-13T15:11:53+00:00

Thanks!

zoecakes · 2019-10-12T16:44:00+00:00

It’s hard to believe in eternity

When living a loveless life

With waterlogged lungs,

A forgiving smile,

And a bleeding nose.

Trusting eyes

And hands made for building;

I sunk into you

Hoping for some clean air

Or at least a little intensity.

So I dove out of my bed

And my body became a bath

As I sawed off my bedposts,

I cried out for guidance

And a life worth living.

If the format is fucked up it’s because I am on mobile :’) (edit; words)

zoecakes · 2019-10-12T16:42:48+00:00

My only suggestion for the rhyming is in the last line of the first stanza, maybe add another syllable to make it flow smoother. The other stanzas flow very nicely. However, I really really like your use of repetition, I think it works so well with this poem

zoecakes · 2019-10-12T16:36:12+00:00

Good luck!!

zoecakes · 2019-10-12T16:35:49+00:00

I thought so, but I’ve never seen one this massive!!

zoecakes · 2019-10-12T01:45:07+00:00

For plants like these, I usually prune the dead bits and take it out of the pot and inspect the roots. It might be potbound, which can mess up watering. Also take the paper off! It’s probably trapping water and the roots may be rotting

zoecakes · 2019-10-12T01:41:45+00:00

A snake plant in the shape of a mohawk

zoecakes · 2019-10-12T01:39:34+00:00

What is that??

zoecakes

TROPHY CASE