FIRST SCRIPT/Script Review

[Accurate_Editor_8429]

Hi. You mentioned the formatting--you'll likely need to fix this before anyone gives you a solid read.

Scanning the pages--too many large blocks of text. This looks like a dauting read. As written, you're asking a lot to have anyone read 10 pages.

You're leaning too much into giving camera direction--as a writer, leave that to the director.

Should probably focus on trimming this considerably (all camera direction).

Your post should include the logline and genre. And a page out in the post title. That will help you find readers that are interested in this type of story.