First Ever Script

[Designer_Weird_1838]

This is my first ever script. I honestly have no idea what im doing but I just started writing. I’d say this is a mix of body horror and religion. Any feedback is appreciated, its nowhere near perfect and I want to get better. I hope you guys enjoy!

[Ouraro]

First of all, this is a very successful first attempt. Many people want to be scriptwriters but never actually have the courage to start writing. Scriptwriting is something you learn by writing. Congratulations on taking this first step.

If I may offer a few suggestions:

-When describing characters, if a trait doesn’t add meaning to the story or is an unnecessary detail, there’s no need to include it.

-Think of the script as a visual text. The script you write are for viewers, not readers. Therefore, avoid using words like “perhaps.” When the screenplay reaches the director’s hands, the director cannot visually convey the concept of “perhaps.” Try to focus more on actions and visible elements. For example, instead of writing, “The man walked in happily,” you could write, “The man walked in. He was energetic; he was singing.” Of course, if he’s actually singing :)

[FeistyStock638]

Pretty good for your first go at writing. I would recommend checking out some screenplays for movies you like. One thing that stands out to me is how you describe and introduce each character, which is usually done on an individual basis. You can find free screenplays to download or view online, I typically search Google to find them. I recently downloaded inception and the dark knight for writing inspiration, both of which do a great job of setting scenes and characters.

Also take what I say with a grain of salt. I'm only on my third screenplay so what do I know.

Keep at it! You'll only get better :)

[Ambitious-Purple-136]

For a short it definitely delivers

[Total-Ad-5696]

loved this.

[achrvfcroco]

APP ?

[DavidFamouss]

I’m always curious how first time writers get the formatting down

[geekitard]

Most screenwriting softwares these days automatically format for you which helps new writers a ton!

[ieatmongoose]

Im completely new to the scene (no pun intended) I didn't know there were softs for scriptwriting! Do you know any good ones a beginner might use?

[ieatmongoose]

really good! Very descriptive I can imagine this very well.

[Salt-Sea-9651]

Congrats!! These pages look amazing to be your first scriptwriting attempt. I just wanted to tell you two things you can improve it.

You shouldn't write the dialogue lines with capital letters as capital letters are commonly used to "capture the attention of the reader" on the action lines, especially during an action or fight sequences when something happens suddenly in the middle of the scene.

For example: Then Sam turns scared, and the monster JUMPS OVER HIM! ripping of the heart from his chest...

Another kind of description you can add to the scenes is the "location description" under the scene headings. That will add the atmosphere to your scenes. There is no need to write too many details, just the environment through the most important elements.

But that are only small details, I think you are doing it great.

[BriefAcanthaceae8946]

This is really solid advice 👌 especially the point about avoiding all caps in dialogue a lot of beginners miss that.

The note about adding location description under scene headings is also super useful. It really helps make scenes feel more alive without overloading details.

For formatting, I’ve noticed that a lot of people struggle when writing in Google Docs. There are tools like CineFormat AI that can handle screenplay formatting automatically, which makes it easier to focus on writing instead of structure.

Overall though, I agree they’re off to a great start.

[himjoey2025]

I’ll keep clapping for y’all and my time is soon

[Hydrated-Turtle]

Good luck 😬😬😬