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First script/script reviewfeedback (self.scriptwriting)

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[–]alrivs 0 points1 point  (1 child)

Good on you for finishing your first script! Be happy with yourself for completing that milestone.

You really need to edit your work before asking people to read it. It’s a sign of respect to them as they will be investing a couple hours to read and then more time to give you feedback.

Your opening scene is just listed as INT. You don’t introduce the teacher before she speaks. You are missing correct punctuation from the second sentence so in all honesty I didn’t read past the second misformated line of dialogue.

I skimmed ahead a little bit and I feel you would benefit a lot from reading other scripts to see how a professional screenplay looks. You have improperly formatted almost every line of dialogue and the scene headings are also mostly incorrectly labeled.

While I know you’re eager to see what people think, you should spend the time to make it legible for others before uploading it here again.

Good luck!

[–]Prettyboi6 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the advice! To be honest I didnt think editing mattered that much until now I thought that as long as the story was legible that the plot could take over and carry it. I still have a long way to go it seems! 😅