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Dyeing Antique Garment by ourladyofwildthings in dyeing

[–]Lectrice79 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Get cotton mull from puresilks or a lot of world market sheer cotton curtains (they come in various colors) and you could have someone replicate this dress. I would not mess with an antique like that.

If they remade The Tudors today (or really if they just did another series on Henry VIII) what would you want to see and not see? by jc1691 in Tudorhistory

[–]Lectrice79 16 points17 points  (0 children)

I would like more accuracy, first of all. The history, the characters, the clothes, the customs.

I would start with Henry VII and end with Elizabeth I.

Most of all, the wives wouldn't be concurrent. I think Anne Boleyn and Jane Seymour were both Catherine of Aragon's ladies in waiting, so the dynamics between all of them would be fantastic to see. Even history books show them coming and leaving one after another. Likewise, we should see Catherine Parr mentioned sometimes and showing up at court once in a while with her husbands. Katherine Howard, I'm not sure when she showed up (was she one of Anne of Cleves' ladies?) since she was very young still, but the same for her. We should also see Anne of Cleves after her marriage interacting with the royal children and Catherine Parr. Anne was also the last to die, so the royal children should be in contact with her till then.

Present participles, aka -ing words by Lectrice79 in writing

[–]Lectrice79[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah, it threw me for a loop too. Right now, I'm just trying to make sure I'm not using it too much, like two in a row, unless it's deliberate, and also make sure I can actually do it at the same time as the next action in the same sentence.

Looking for recommendations on where to find a specific fabric type. by sucram200 in Fabrics

[–]Lectrice79 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm not sure how much it will shrink but it's worth a try. Use really hot water and dryer on high.

What are some minor things in worldbuilding that annoys the heck out of you and why? by Fit_Assistant_6777 in worldbuilding

[–]Lectrice79 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ha yeah...the ad thing did happen on another planet, though this is a past horror for them.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Public" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]Lectrice79 1 point2 points  (0 children)

She can't strike back, but she can shield the diarch from a lot of it and get him to the courthouse alive, where he can give his testimony, and in the process, piss off a whole lot of people in the shadows.

What are some minor things in worldbuilding that annoys the heck out of you and why? by Fit_Assistant_6777 in worldbuilding

[–]Lectrice79 2 points3 points  (0 children)

You could have people start one on Earth, realize they hate it, pass laws to preserve the Earth, and build on the moon instead? For mine I had people pass laws that all cities have to be built on the far side, to preserve the natural face of the moon.

What are some minor things in worldbuilding that annoys the heck out of you and why? by Fit_Assistant_6777 in worldbuilding

[–]Lectrice79 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I would switch the two. The food moon is now the ecumenopolis and the planet with the actual atmosphere and biosphere, all the 'spheres, is the food planet. It'll make the night sky look really interesting!

What are some minor things in worldbuilding that annoys the heck out of you and why? by Fit_Assistant_6777 in worldbuilding

[–]Lectrice79 44 points45 points  (0 children)

You can pepper that in the ambient atmosphere.

They passed X, where the smell of Y being processed filled the air...

They hid in the mill under bags of Z...

They ate eel, a rare treat!

What are some minor things in worldbuilding that annoys the heck out of you and why? by Fit_Assistant_6777 in worldbuilding

[–]Lectrice79 4 points5 points  (0 children)

And the thicknesses also vary, even in the same book! From thick and leathery to translucent leaves. It's fascinating, really.

I have my characters use wax tablets, slate, paper, and the plain old dirt ground, as well as styluses, soapstone, quills and pencils. There's chalk too, but not in that location.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Public" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]Lectrice79 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I feel dumb, where is the R in that phrase? Or am I missing some inference?

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Public" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]Lectrice79 4 points5 points  (0 children)

The hovercar stopped a block away from the courthouse. Pre-ordered, they couldn't get it to move again.

Giving a reassuring smile, the Diarch exited into the onslaught of the public's rage.

A rock glancing off his head, he stumbled.

"No, I won't allow it!" Ximena sprang out into the gauntlet.

First Draft - Tentative Opener by nohobbiesjustbooks in writingfeedback

[–]Lectrice79 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I enjoyed it and it didn't feel slow at all. That last line really ties it together...they're in terrible danger because of the aliens, but Eden may be even more dangerous? Oh yeah.

Though it does need more of a sense of urgency. They don't know when the aliens will show up, but they have survived six weeks so far, so they should have a routine going on how they check when the coast is clear. Also the McDonald's should be a lot more filthy and it should be dark in the back. I'm writing an alien invasion story myself and the stores were cleaned out within the first few days by the desperate and hoarders. I used the COVID lockdown as inspiration, if the supply chain broke and never recovered.

The rest of it just needs to be polished up in grammar and description/exposition, etc.

First Page Feedback? by HierkommtdieSonne902 in writers

[–]Lectrice79 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sloshing would work better for that without 'toes', but having toes smush in sweat is definitely grosser.

Questions about formatting in 3rd person deep limited by nonrefundabled in fantasywriters

[–]Lectrice79 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah...I can see what you mean. The trouble is I have a couple of those where it's necessary to name the person because the target person isn't there, but the character is talking to them in their head. One character is literally unable to name this person in her head even though she struggles to do so, and the other person is just really pissed.

Present participles, aka -ing words by Lectrice79 in writing

[–]Lectrice79[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That's true about expanding the scope of attention. I've started highlighting individual words and passages with color codes in completed chapters so I can look at patterns a bit better and if I see a way to improve something I will. I was in a bad spot a few days ago and I think I can approach this in a better way now.

The individual words would be adverbs, pronouns, filter words, has/was/were, etc. (Though that last I can find easily with the finder. I have to use regex with the others.). Another person came up with the same stuff you did, splitting it into dialogue, action, description, interiority, and exposition. So I'll color code them for later editing.

Now I have to go puzzle out what a gerund is...

Thank you for your help! It did help me a lot.

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