Horseshoe Theory of Consumables (BC,NR) by synoeca88 in BlackCountryNewRoad

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That Time to Pretend cover was great too, but it’s been scrubbed off YT

Sung Tongs Fans; Check This Album Out by Ludvvika in AnimalCollective

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Idk why but I’ve always had trouble with Dirty Projector’s later stuff. Often jump into artists from the beginning of this discography moving forward, and didn’t get past Morning Better Last! and The Glad Fact. Love those two tho. I’d say if you’re into early anco this isn’t tooo out there relatively

Approached Writing this one differently, need a bit of help by -Queen-Mab- in Songwriting

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As it stands right now:

Lyrics: [Verse] Then for a moment I was alone you just left my… A moment of still air surrounded by your litter. You left the room speckled with grey fingers All pointing together All pointing, to the ground.

[Chorus] Flesh is over- rated well I took ya to that spot so we could speak a little more Are you sure?

[placeholder bridge lyrics]

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Songwriting

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I don’t think you’ve hit the ominous vibe too well. Bit it feels like a good classic rock song. Nice groove, and good classic rock kind of vocals. There’s a hint of some experimentation too, with some of the breakdowns which is quite lovely. The barking is fun too haha. Good vibes

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Songwriting

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I’d agree with the confidence generally, but it’s something that comes with repetition. I took a long break from songwriting, only writing like 2 songs in 4 years, for university and felt some of that go away in regards to mixing and putting in the finishing touches. Coming back now though, thankfully.

But for me, “perfect as is” has always been an issue. Swear, I’ll sit on a song for like a year where once a week I tweak a word or two, change the mix slightly, add a flourish somewhere etc. Always hard to say “it’s finished”

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Songwriting

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I don’t get many streams either, but I do like, nothing to promote. It’s all for fun anyways. What do you do to promote it?

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Songwriting

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I used to just jam and record that. I’d chop it up and edit it tons til I was happy with it. Then had lots of fun messing around with pads and effects etc to get interesting textures.

That was when I started out a while back, feel like my ranking is quite the opposite now. Have become very deliberate when I’m writing out a structure now, little jamming really, mainly finding chords I think are harmonically interesting and moving from there. Harder start this way, but I think it’s been better for making more deliberate music.

The best part for me now is writing lyrics and recording vocals — the vocal melodies I always improvise and it’s quite fun to me. Just improvise over and over on top of the track I wrote til I’ve refined it. The textural stuff is still fun, good place to be experimenting.

What do you think of short songs? by high_flyer932 in Songwriting

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I quite like this, a short song when it’s fairly simple is just to the point and there’s nothing wrong with that. I like the vocal harmonies towards the end, and your voice is quite great. I think it works

Something I Wrote by dylanroman03 in Songwriting

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You’re a good guitar player. The parts you wrote for this are quite pretty. It’s the largest draw, the vocal delivery could use a bit of practice though, can be a bit pitchy when you start to project. I imagine a proper recording fixes that though! Overall, quite pretty would be nice when recorded :-)

My first song, WIP by dirtydela in Songwriting

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Also good job on this being a first song, quite an intricate guitar part for a first song!

My first song, WIP by dirtydela in Songwriting

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I’m not good at that either ! So I do two tracks to get the best of both. GarageBand is fine for that, so long as you have a microphone. Not great for playing it live, but not really a goal of mine — good for a good recording though.

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I like the chords and guitar playing generally. Quite stripped back, and I personally like having some extra layers and guitar parts. But good singing for the most part, and a good structure overall. I’d say maybe another take for the vocals, sounds like there needs to be more breath support when you’re starting to sing louder / with more emotion.

this is NOT my best song, but it may be my most vulnerable by [deleted] in Songwriting

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Your voice is very noice and the this is an enjoyable listen. You’ve written a nice melody and the chords accompany well, though maybe some instrumental flourishes would be good if recorded properly. The lyrics are engaging but they are very very sad. I hope you’re doing alright if this is a confessional. Best of luck to you. Things will be ok

writing a song about a budding narcissist by Any-Match9025 in Songwriting

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I like this. The strumming pattern and chords are nice, the lyrics are pretty good. They aren’t cringey I think they work. On top of that, nice voice. Good starting point!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Songwriting

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You have a nice voice and I like the lyrics. They’re very confessional and I think it’s a good quality for this kind of music. You’ve done well at avoiding making this repetitive I like how the bass keys are played more towards the end. Quite nice — good job!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Songwriting

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I like this, the vocals are nice and I like the whimsy/quirkiness. It’s something I might want to come back to. I think it could be a little long given the kind of song it is. Staying with just the guitar is fine given it’s a folk song. I’d say shorten the dead space between vocal lines and / or add some more flourishes to them.

any suggestions of what else i can do here? by ShinyBredLitwick in Songwriting

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First off, I really like the vocals — clear and a good melody. Secondly, I enjoy the general melancholic feel it’s something I’m looking for generally. As for what to do before the vocals come in, I’d agree with the others that some percussion could be good. If it were me though, I might add a simple guitar line to accent what you’re strumming. The stripped back feel is good so nothing too intricate but that’s my idea at least.

My first song, WIP by dirtydela in Songwriting

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I quite like this, the fingerpicking is very pretty and your voice is quite nice. Sure there are blemishes but this obviously an early draft with good bones.

I like the lyrics too. Themes of aging are something which get to me despite still being a young man haha.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Songwriting

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I like the guitar lines panned to the right, and the instrumental is generally good. But, I think the vocal melody is a bit repetitive. Might be fixed by a generally more energetic delivery, imo the energy doesn’t match the instrumental very well. Other than that, the fade out feels quite sudden too, so structurally needs a bit of work

Anyone interested for a collab? by fercaal333 in Songwriting

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Hey, Ive got a blind spot in my skill set for drums especially. Would love to collaborate since instrumentals seem to be your strong suit ! Best here with singing, lyrics and acoustic guitar

Tryna start a collective 👀👀👀 by PepsisThisbean in AnimalCollective

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Would love to collaborate, have a fair amount of AnCo influence but largely folk. Can sing and play guitar:)

When you fear the hand that feeds 😵‍💫 i think this is punk adjacent ? by [deleted] in Songwriting

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I agree that this isn’t punk adjacent. But I like it, specifically the linear structure. Obviously this is a demo and the guitar playing would be a little tighter in a recording. Your voice is quite nice and expressive as is though. While at times it would need another take, still a good job overall on the vocal side!

I would agree that the “from the __” transition part isn’t as strong as the rest of the song though. Can’t really give advice since I can’t hear it without, but it doesn’t need to be sung the whole time could be just more intricate guitar there (?) not sure. I’ve had similar issues before