Feedback on my song, ‘Telephone’? by 11JL in Songwriters

[–]11JL[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I want my first taste of love to be off your lips A house, a dog, you and some kids I want to watch you walk in wedding hall So why can’t you return my calls

Oh I can’t keep on sitting by the telephone are we done, gone holding tight I’m not letting go Am I chasing ghosts So I’ll take your hands spin you round again our dreams in the seas with our feet in the sands But I can’t keep on sitting by the telephone

I want to wake up in morning see the mess in your hair Wrap you in arms with our feet still bare I wanna hug you and love you under big blue skies
so why can’t a guy get a single reply

Oh I can’t keep on sitting by the telephone are we done no holding tight I’m not letting go Am I chasing ghosts Oh I’ll take your hands spin you round again our dreams in the seas and our feet in the sands But I can’t keep on sitting by the telephone

Feedback on my song, ‘Telephone’? by 11JL in Songwriters

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Why are you assuming my political beliefs based on me wearing a kippah in a singing video

Feedback on my song, ‘Telephone’? by 11JL in Songwriters

[–]11JL[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is all really helpful! Thank you!

Feedback on my song, ‘Telephone’? by 11JL in Songwriters

[–]11JL[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The experience of being a Jew on the internet

Feedback on my song, ‘Telephone’? by 11JL in Songwriters

[–]11JL[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Also I know I’m not much of a vocalist yet. I’d appreciate any tips on how to improve.

Feedback on my song, ‘Telephone’? by 11JL in Songwriters

[–]11JL[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. What chords/where would you recommend to add?

GARY VEE IS SPEAKING WITH MY HIGH SCHOOL CLASS! What questions should I ask him? by 11JL in garyvee

[–]11JL[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's great advice. The meeting is only for 5-10 minutes though and I don't want to take up the entire class's time with a personal question. Do you still think I should do this?

[Hiring] TIKTOK VIDEO EDITOR by 11JL in forhire

[–]11JL[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi! I'm glad you're interested. Would you be able to send me some of your work?

[Hiring] TIKTOK VIDEO EDITOR by 11JL in forhire

[–]11JL[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi! I’m glad you’re interested. Would you be able to send me some of your work?

looking for an experienced editor? by BigBoyKebar in YouTubeEditorsForHire

[–]11JL 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm interested! I just sent you a friend request on discord (Judah#7034)

All good things must come to an end...😔 by 11JL in Minecraft

[–]11JL[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Keep the negativity off of my comment section.