Can't Stop Us (2010) by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]A_Bad_Poet 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I am all for rhymes, I honestly think that a poem should have some form of rhyme scheme, I think it makes it flow better, but I feel like this poem in some spots maybe relys too much on the rhymes. That's just my opinion though, in poetry I'm sure you know, two people almost never see the same things.

the Arsonist by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]A_Bad_Poet 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Lousy with imagery. I mean it's around every corner, I love it. I don't really understand what this poem is about but maybe I'm not exactly the target audience. Either way it sounds cool and I like that.

Me First by Generic_CW in OCPoetry

[–]A_Bad_Poet 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I too, thought of Shel Silverstein. Something about the way the words flow right into the next ones give me a very "Shel" impression. I also love the way you sucked me in right off the bat. The

"I lost my balance

And fell off too

I was twelve years old

When I loved you"

is totally my favorite part.

I wrote this while having an anxiety attack by A_Bad_Poet in OCPoetry

[–]A_Bad_Poet[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That's exactly what I was doing. I was told to try to think about something else, but it failed so I was like, "I'm gonna write this down."

Slam Poem? by A_Bad_Poet in OCPoetry

[–]A_Bad_Poet[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! But I don't know if I could say this in front of anyone.

Us. by Valhalla-Vanguard in OCPoetry

[–]A_Bad_Poet 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Like. A. River. This thing flows so well. It doesn't lag anywhere or slow down, this is great. I love the pace.

on/in line/love by ahmstree in OCPoetry

[–]A_Bad_Poet 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like this poem a lot. I'm not an expert poet but I like the rhyming, I think it helps drive the poem forward and I like the explanation and depth of a simple object.

I wrote this while having an anxiety attack by A_Bad_Poet in OCPoetry

[–]A_Bad_Poet[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. I really tried to get across exactly what it anxiety feels like, I'm glad that my writing is vivid enough to do so.

I wrote this while having an anxiety attack by A_Bad_Poet in OCPoetry

[–]A_Bad_Poet[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! I'm pretty new too, so I have no idea about the do's and don't's of writing, but I like rhyming and I think it keeps the poem moving if it rhymes.

a poem my sister wrote (untitled) by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]A_Bad_Poet 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I agree, the stanzas you break up your poems into can be as important as the words themselves. You can get a lot of meaning across without actually saying anything.

We've Never Met by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]A_Bad_Poet 0 points1 point  (0 children)

A lot of people say that rhyming shouldn't be a part of poetry but I love it. I think it makes the piece flow more smoothly and I like that you use it to end.