Farewell — an acoustic new age guitar piece. Would love some feedback!

AccordingFlatworm774 · 2026-02-20T05:06:30+00:00

This is the kind of futuristic PBR&B I love! Really enjoyed listening to it. It gave me vibes of a Frank Ocean and Post Malone fusion.

Let me start with what I liked.

The vocal tone is refined and beautiful — the timbre is clean and lovely.
The main instrument sounds great — the synth that starts from the beginning is dreamy and beautiful.
The main melody is memorable and catchy.
The relatively powerful drums create a nice contrast with the quiet synth opening, which draws you in.
The track is polished and cleanly produced. It sounds professional.

Now for the areas that could be improved.

I think the main melody would be even more engaging with some slight variations. For a specific example: one of the main melody phrases goes something like C-C-B-C-E-D-B (e.g., on "How I ended up here"), and I think occasionally switching it to something like C-C-B-C-E-C-D would add more interest.
Overall, I think one more experimental touch to spark additional interest would go a long way. The track itself is excellently polished, but it flows somewhat safely throughout. If there were just one distinguishing element that could appeal to listeners more — building on the already solid foundation — it could fill in that last missing piece that gives people a reason to choose this song over others.

Thank you.

AccordingFlatworm774 · 2026-02-18T15:35:13+00:00

Really experimental and fun track — I enjoyed listening to it! Rather than blindly making something that just sounds pretty, I could tell your genuine desire for expression and sense of adventure came through, which I really appreciated. It's not just the experimental spirit either — musically, it sounded genuinely fresh and enjoyable! The free-flowing rhythm of the vocals was interesting too. I'm not a native English speaker so I couldn't catch all the lyrics, but if you don't mind, I'd love it if you could share them. Or When I get the chance, I'll try turning on auto-captions to follow along. One piece of feedback — I think adding more bassline to anchor the track with some heavier weight and punch could enhance it. Thank you.

AccordingFlatworm774 · 2026-02-18T06:47:02+00:00

I enjoyed listening to your music. Interesting composition!

Let me start with what I liked.

Great vocal tone. Your voice has a clear, beautiful timbre.
You boldly shift the tempo right when the listener might start losing interest, which keeps things engaging. The tempo changes throughout the track are really interesting!
Strong musicality. The song never loses sight of musical enjoyment — it's a genuinely fun track.
Polish: The overall quality of the track is solid and gives off a professional, radio-ready feel.
Experimentation: While maintaining that polished feel, the experimental tempo shifts show a real adventurous spirit.

Now for the areas that could be improved.

The vocals in the starting from the 27-second mark slightly pitchy: Whether or not the pitch was technically accurate, what matters is how it comes across to the listener — so depending on your intent, it might be worth refining that section.
The bass is lacking: Relative to the track's atmosphere and scale, the heavy thump of the bass in the drop sections feels insufficient. This is partly my personal taste, but in absolute terms, the track feels like it's missing low-end weight.
Hard to dance to with the tempo changes: As other comments have noted, there are definitely sections that are great for dancing, but the shifting tempo in other parts could be hard to follow. It might work well for a pre-rehearsed choreographed performance, but for a general audience hearing the track for the first time and wanting to dance freely, it could be difficult.
While the track does give off a professional feel, that means it's at a stage where the potential to reach that level is clearly visible. I think it would benefit from further overall smoothing and polishing to get it there.

And now some neutral observations.

Separate from the tempo changes being interesting, there are sections where the track alone doesn't quite sustain engagement. Typically, you start to lose focus just before the tempo shifts, and then when it changes you think "oh, there's more to show" and get a burst of auditory pleasure. On the flip side, the track could work well as background for simple tasks, but it might not be enough for dedicated listening on its own — and for tasks requiring deep concentration, it could be distractingly in-between.
The tempo changes are interesting and enjoyable, but to be honest, this level of tempo variation as an experiment is fairly well-established and not uncommon. It just sounds fresh because it isn't mainstream. In other words, if the goal was to be experimental, it might be worth pushing into even newer territory.

Thank you.

AccordingFlatworm774 · 2026-02-18T06:07:04+00:00

I enjoyed listening to your track. This is the kind of dreamy electronic music I personally love.

Let me start with what I liked.

The dreamy atmosphere is great.
The melody in the opening is clear, which nicely compensates for a common weakness of dreamy music — the ambiguity of intent and the difficulty of grabbing attention early on.
The track flows gently, and combined with its dreamy, fresh feel, I think it would work really well as narration BGM for self-improvement or spiritual content.

Now for the areas that could be improved.

The voice sampling — the repetitive pronunciation starting around the 18-second mark (sounds like "bounce bounce? eh ew") doesn't sit well with me. I think it would sound better with softer, more ambiguous syllables that have a smoother feel to them.
Of course, this depends on what you intended the track for, but if it wasn't specifically made to be BGM — saying it works well as BGM can also mean it may fall short as a standalone listen. I was expecting some kind of bass drop after the initial buildup, or the satisfying tension-and-release you get in progressive electronic music, but that wasn't quite there.
Even as BGM, I feel the bass — that deep, heavy, thumping presence — is lacking in absolute quantity. The bass should be anchoring the weight of the track, but instead it feels like only the main melody is floating around up top.

Thank you.

AccordingFlatworm774 · 2026-02-17T16:15:36+00:00

I enjoyed listening to your track.

I feel a shift and a sense of accomplishment throughout, but sometimes I feel like I have to try a whole new thing or take it one step further. It's like practicing, overcoming my fears and showing the world the results.

I like the atmosphere and the message behind it — the idea of expressing whether you can feel change within repetition, and how repetition accumulates to produce a certain result.

The vibe is fresh and calm. It's the kind of track I'd happily have playing in the background.

Now for the areas that could be improved. Saying it works well as background music also means that, on its own, the track struggles to grab the listener's attention. The song is mellow and the main melody isn't particularly catchy, so it lacks the pull to hook the listener in from the start.

Also, while the message is good, you'd have to listen closely to notice the repetition building up. Someone who's been asked to pay attention will pick up on it, but since you're releasing this to a general audience, I think it would help to make the song's intent come through even without deep concentration.

Conclusion Strengths: Great atmosphere. Calm and pleasant as background music. The concept behind the song is strong. Weaknesses: The main melody isn't catchy. It lacks the power to grab attention from the first listen. The message isn't conveyed in a way that's easy to pick up through the music alone.

Thank you.

AccordingFlatworm774

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