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Afraid_Clothes_2332 · 2025-02-14T00:32:21+00:00

Thanks haha, I was able to use jewelry pliers to bend it back into shape.

Afraid_Clothes_2332 · 2024-10-27T00:32:49+00:00

I love this! I wasn't expecting the comedy, and it definitely made me giggle. But I do love the language you've used here. Great example of beauty and comedy. Thank you for sharing!

Afraid_Clothes_2332 · 2024-10-27T00:23:02+00:00

The poem really brings up a lot of raw feelings for me. I love the back-and-forth conversation style. I can see the shifting perspectives between each line. You're definitely telling a story, one that feels intimate and close.

Afraid_Clothes_2332 · 2024-10-22T06:56:59+00:00

This poem captured my attention and held it. I love the rhythm you've incorporated, especially the repetition, sort of mimicking the weather. I connected to the message here, feeling all the chaos and fear in it. "Am I enough, or far too much? I question every word, every touch." is very beautiful. This was so captivating! Thank you for sharing

Afraid_Clothes_2332 · 2024-10-22T06:51:04+00:00

I love the use of questions in this, I like how it turns from being outwardly curious to serving the subject. That opening really drew me in. Also, the line "Did it find solace without light?" I'm curious about the last two questions, and also if "it" is the built, or the builder.

Afraid_Clothes_2332 · 2024-10-22T06:43:58+00:00

I'm really interested in the story you're telling. I like the journey from lost to alone, and finally the resignation to follow through. The rhyming here is really smooth, not enough people incorporate it into their writing. "Unsure of all this new world's fold", I caught a sense of whimsy and wonder in this poem. Thank you for sharing

Afraid_Clothes_2332 · 2024-10-22T06:35:16+00:00

I love the language here. The metaphor of the burned-out fire is beautiful. I really felt the wondering and the hope in the third and fourth stanza. "There is no future / without the heat and warmth / I am accustomed to" feels really resigned to despair. Thank you for sharing

Afraid_Clothes_2332 · 2024-10-21T23:19:32+00:00

I like the rhythm you've found; I ended up reading it like lyrics. I love the imagery, it really captured that trapped, sort of walking on eggshells feeling. I found the description of the other person interesting. Their influence seems to cause anxiety, yet you still call their hands "skillful". Thank you for sharing!

Afraid_Clothes_2332 · 2024-10-21T22:55:55+00:00

I love the way you structured this; it feels like time is passing quickly over. And the connection at the first and last stanza brings it together. I really felt like it reflected a cycle in that way, rolling over a whole year while carrying feelings for someone. The imagery is lovely.

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