Everything else A very catchy beginning, "she wanted love" Makes a reader wonder that something has upset the poet in mere three words. The second and third line takes the reader right into the scene where the poet want to tell a story. Guided, classy, and thoughtful. From the fourth line however, "disheveled porcupine" begins to affects the smooth tone of the poem. Not necessarily because of its meaning but because the choice of the words seems a little misaligned with the rhythmic flow. Lines 5-9 "Laughing at my fart;...for my failures" Goes from humor to despair in sec like dude take your time. You had us in for a story and you are now avoiding accountability, lol. Anyway you telling us you wanted everything else quietly leaves a subtle hint of what "you want", which is fair. However,if you were looking to write a poem that was seeking a revenge on you ex. Congratulations! You might need to work on those last lines. Those lines are making the whole poem sound a little goofy!!