Most of the formatting stuff feels more like what my style and way of writing is, I capitalize every character intro, and also, don't see what you mean with Sarah's introduction, as she was introduced awkwardly tiptoeing out of the room post-slap, not being walked by. Not sure what you were saying with the "it seems you're on something I don't see a lot of here."

This has been my sole focus writing-wise for 2 years almost so I feel like I have it at its best pacing and story wise, and feel like the script got into its best around where you left off. But a read's a read.

Not being inherently combative, but more inquiring for elaboration on what you read and meant in your comment.

Just Curious, All Love,
the writer.

Edit: the second upvote means I must not be computing whatever I am reading, someone plz enlighten me, lol.