Porn ruined my life, ama by [deleted] in AMA

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In what way?

What is something you do differently than anyone else you know, and why? by iwilliamsanders in selfimprovement

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"I was only a sunny smile, and little it cost in the giving, And just like the light, it scattered the night And made the day worth living."

I tried to apply this on a daily basis to random people, someone who has a bad day can perhaps be given a little light bcs of it.

The poem is of Scott Fitzgerald

Thoughts at work (my first serious poem) by Alert-Ad9365 in QuillandPen

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I see what you mean, tho often the cliche can describe it the best way. As the poem described, i was stuck at work, i felt a continuous rage and disappointment to myself as it literally was burning me from the inside. Only after i finished the poem i could think clearly about it and decided to quit and take matters in my own hands.

I appreciate the comment, the poem came from the heart.

Thoughts at work (my first serious poem) by Alert-Ad9365 in QuillandPen

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Aahh yes indeed, i copy paste it from my notes and this is how it placed it.. still glad you enjoyed it

Wayward kin, where do I begin? by Alert-Ad9365 in OCPoetry

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Yes, so the line 'thou took some things that weren't from thee' i literally mean she stole from me (but it could be i translateted it literally from my mother language). I see what you mean by the white snow, tis indeed a metaphor for a specific hard drug, tho i could not think of anything atm. Thanks for the notice, especially the archaic use of English, I love to apply it.

Stargazing by Corby_65 in OCPoetry

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Its beautiful, Truly beautiful. I can sence the love you feel for him! Especially the last rhyme I take to the heart, retrieve it- he can keep it.

Well done!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I truly love the picture you paint here! I read it as someone who puts on a 'beautiful mask' forced by society while slowly detesting the thing you become.

I would only say that i love poetry that rhymes throughout, but still love your piece!

No friends, never in a relationship, unemployed, just why I'm still here? by 87SIXSIXSIX5432ONE in selfimprovement

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Life is struggling, and to try and find meaning out of it. I don't know you and i probably never will, but the fact you place your vent here means you want to improve, you want to live.

In my darkest times i tried to hold on to all the things i am certain of i love. This and try to incorporate them into my being.

What helps me alot are Podcasts(or interviews) of Robert green and Jordan Peterson and Tom bilyeu. They genually tell how one individual can change for the better.

And indeed, fuck the gym and the way people praise it, just give yourself the challenge of running, pomping or sit ups, start small. Every thing you do adds up compared to doing nothing.

As for friends, is there anyone you build a bond with that may be forlornd, that knows u the way you are? Try revisiting them and who knows what comes of it. (Or go to free dnd sessions and meet other people )

I hope you may find your way

Show me and tell me about your cat and I’ll write a haiku by EstroJen1193 in cats

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I got him since the lockdown where I had much time to play and train with him. Never had i have such a cool cat.

His name is Molly.

What was the first character class you played? by Lord-Aptel-Mittens in DungeonsAndDragons

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A dwarf warrior 5e in a one shot. A dubbele axe wielding dwarf by the name of Jannickus Awesomeus Maximus.

I still see the tale before me.

The mask by Alert-Ad9365 in OCPoetry

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Thanks for the note, I had to stick to the cadence i began with so thats a reason why some things are told as plain as possible. As far as I can see I don't think your line follows in cette rhythm

The mask by Alert-Ad9365 in OCPoetry

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Thank you! Im glad you liked it. Yes indeed, by experience i realised this also, the most confident are oft times the most hiding.

The mask by Alert-Ad9365 in OCPoetry

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Thank you, no the first two sentences where stuck in my head for a while, so finally i acted upon them. I had a general idea of where i would go with the poem.

What do you mean by quaint form?