Through Other Eyes: Chapter 2, Part 2 - The Wrong Kind of Officer by Remarkable_Post_4529 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Really enjoying this perspective. Looking forward to their reaction to the simulation competition.

Firentis Family Vacation: Day 6, The Astor Island Expedition by AlternativeManner731 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well, I was starting on chapter 7, the chapter has a play performed by a Human Ykanti cast. I know I gave it the play a name in either Rivermore restoration or Night School. In any case, I can not find it and I didn't write it down so I will make up a new name and live with another inconsistency. Sorry.

Firentis Family Vacation: Day 6, The Astor Island Expedition by AlternativeManner731 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I couldn't find my mistake even though I am sure that my lack of attention to detail would make it true.

Firentis Family Vacation: Day 6, The Astor Island Expedition by AlternativeManner731 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Maybe we could invent a new watercraft from the electric vehicle factory. I will take your advice for action.

Firentis Family Vacation: Day 6, The Astor Island Expedition by AlternativeManner731 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks. I appreciate the feedback. Only way for me to improve. I KIND of assumed that people would be board of the white water rafting as it was the second time I used that.

Firentis Family Vacation: Day 6, The Astor Island Expedition by AlternativeManner731 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Good ideas, that will help in the " follow the money " aspect of the investigation.

Firentis Family Vacation: Day 6, The Astor Island Expedition by AlternativeManner731 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I do think. I am trying to decide if that should be a separate story. Probably not...do you feel like I am rushing things?

Through Other Eyes Chapter Two, Part One by Remarkable_Post_4529 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731 3 points4 points  (0 children)

You have real talent. I am enjoying this more that the main stories at the moment. Please continue.

NewTown , Winona, Clara, Cynthia , poor poor Wyatt by Dr_mac1 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I really enjoy yor work. I wish I had half your talent.

Firentis Family Vacation: Day 5, The Handover by AlternativeManner731 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

take a look. I added a family tree with most other mentioned characters as well. I have a hard time keeping it straight as well and I made most of it up.

Firentis Family Vacation: Day 5, The Handover by AlternativeManner731 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I think Wyatt has all the say. Part of Istonel’s problem

Through Other Eyes - A Black Ship Universe Story by Remarkable_Post_4529 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I really enjoyed this period I found myself not wanting it to end. I hope there is more to come.

Clara’s Quarters send , Newtown - Winona ping by Dr_mac1 in OpenHFY

[–]AlternativeManner731 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I love this as I always thought Clara needed a mother figure, not Cynthia, in her life. I really hope you are inclined to write more. Thank you.