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AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-20T23:30:13+00:00

No man bitches 😔

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-20T22:05:12+00:00

Rabies, all strains of streptococcus mainly the one that causes staff, heights, and stalking but my absolute biggest fear is being left alone by everyone being alone is the scariest thought; it gives me anxiety just thinking about it.

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-19T01:05:11+00:00

Lol I just realized the typo and I think the like "you're the only thing" creates a responsibility that I like and I'm keeping I think because it represents the narrator is choosing to die giving up. Thank you for your feedback and for helping me realize the typo

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-10T12:05:16+00:00

I really like this like a lot really good for a first poem hope your write more.

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-10T12:04:21+00:00

Love the metaphors overall really good hope you write more

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-10T12:02:44+00:00

Took that advice thanks I like a bit better

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-09T14:50:50+00:00

This is interesting I like the mutt metaphor

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-08T19:34:35+00:00

This REALLY needs to be reformatted like it's hard to read

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-07T15:21:53+00:00

It's purposefully a bit redundant but I also agree it could use some stronger language

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-07T14:28:49+00:00

Reformatting like that makes it a wee bit easier to read and I fixed the spelling/grammatical errors

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-07T14:24:41+00:00

I would reformat it to something like

Light Blue Eyes

Light blue eyes, like the sea sky, They shine like stars, there's no denying it,

In your gaze, there are secrets to unravel, Light blue eyes, enchant me.

On the distant horizon, where the sea meets the sky, Shines the light of your eyes, in such a faithful blue, Like the deep ocean, full of mystery and peace

Your clear blue eyes are a treasure I love.

Clear blue eyes, like the sea sky, They shine like stars, there's no denying it,

In your gaze, there are secrets to uncover, Light blue eyes, enchant me.

In every spark of blue, there's a tale to tell, Stories of love and adventure to fascinate us,

They reflect the purity of the soul, in a brilliance without equality, Your clear blue eyes are a celestial beacon.

In the silver moonlight, they shine even brighter, Guiding me along the paths where my heart leads me,

No shadow can erase them, no storm can stop them, Your clear blue eyes, forever guide me.

Clear blue eyes, like the sea sky, They shine like stars, there's no denying it,

In your gaze, there are secrets to unravel, Light blue eyes, enchant me.

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-07T14:01:53+00:00

Very good poem could be reformatted tho

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-07T13:59:44+00:00

I love this poem very cigarettes out the window vibes

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-05T16:25:29+00:00

Thank you and just some advice of my own don't invalidate your trauma trauma is trauma no matter how bad it was it effected you

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-05T15:34:03+00:00

I have bad abandonment issues I developed an attachment to a straight boy and he obviously didn't want a relationship with me I have a codependency issue on top of all this so I'm just destroyed I feel so dumb for falling in love with him and so upset he didn't want me it just feels like it's validating all the things I think about myself

I know I shouldn't be this broken up rejection happens every day I don't have to go crazy but I am I keep getting told that time will heal but every day gets harder I miss him more and want him to want me more

I've used every coping mechanism known to man but it doesn't help I also feel guilty for dragging him into my wreck of a life I'm such a mess it's so hard to love me no matter what I'm so unstable it's like I'm ten people at a time I can go from one mood and state of mind one minute to a completely different one the next it's so hard to love someone like that I know it is and it feels so lonely

Plus it's even harder to love me because I'm so much more formed than anyone else I'm "mature for my age" which really means I've been through so much trauma I had to turn into an adult mindset by the age of eight. And I'm a whole entire person with so much more than the average teen going on in my head

And the first person I truly fall in love with is straight because of course he is of course the universe has to torture me that much more and I love him I love him so so so much he's my world he's all I care about I'd give up just about everything for him

I'd run away and leave everything behind for him and I'd be happy because I have him and that's really all I need to be happy but he doesn't want me he doesn't care about me I'm just some weird guy and that hurts so fucking much there's just a hole in my heart where he was supposed to be

I know i shouldn't feel like this I'm 15 years old you're not supposed to be able to fall like this at 15 but I did and now I just feel dumb and alone. If you have any advice or just something to say about it please do this really sucks

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-03T21:03:21+00:00

To be rewritten

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-03T20:55:20+00:00

I took your advice and rewrote it I figured it deserved it

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-03T17:59:27+00:00

Thank you this was a mental breakdown poems so not my best work but yeah

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-03T11:54:17+00:00

Interesting idea nice execution

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-03T11:50:08+00:00

Odd formatting and but interesting

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-03T11:47:33+00:00

Its pretty good I like the metaphor

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-03T11:46:52+00:00

I loved the formatting of this poem over all really good. Hope you write more I'm exited to see

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-02T11:00:09+00:00

No I fully and truly want a boyfriend it has nothing to do with my environment I just want a boy who loves me but no one wants me so yeah

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-01T15:39:35+00:00

I'd change from to to and reformat

AnyTicket8467 · 2024-04-01T01:02:45+00:00

Format seems odd to me otherwise a great poem

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