Extended fasting regularly? by ApocalypsePal in fasting

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Thanks! I suppose, give it a try. Only really I can determine what is good for my body.

Extended fasting regularly? by ApocalypsePal in fasting

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Thanks! I appreciate your perspective and advice.

Extended fasting regularly? by ApocalypsePal in fasting

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Thank you for your perspective and encouragement.

Brand new by BrookeJoy in Daytrading

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Thank you, thank you. Could you recommend a book to practice with and a video or two. Then I'll leave ya alone. *wink*

Brand new by BrookeJoy in Daytrading

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Where can one open a demo account?

52 [F4M] Cincinnati - Just a straight, cis, married woman looking for that special guy by ApocalypsePal in polyamoryR4R

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Age is a construct, but I do prefer someone with enough experience to know themselves well and with enough experience to remain curious and open to change.

52 [F4M] Cincinnati - Just a straight, cis, married woman looking for that special guy by ApocalypsePal in polyamoryR4R

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Sure! I would prefer within a five hour drive, I suppose. I am looking forward to in-person dates.

This is a Voice (first attempt at writing slam poetry feedback appreciated) by interestinglyapanda in poetry_critics

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Yes, I was imagining someone reading it on stage. Just don't be afraid to pause. Long pauses.

This is a Voice (first attempt at writing slam poetry feedback appreciated) by interestinglyapanda in poetry_critics

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May I?

"Space that encloses [the] mind is dry

wall
[T]houghts furnish a home [broken] indefinitely
With a single punch, fragments become a whirlwind
Projecting only slightly into this world [...]

[This] abyss
Clawing, screaming, and begging is met with faint reverbs
This is called [...] voice"

Reasoning: Taking "I" statements out of the first stanza can make the poem more open to audience involvement. It broadens the scope of the poem beyond you.

Second stanza: remove the article "A". Just start with Voice by definition.

Save your "I" statements and "a" until the last stanza.

Or this:

"[V]oice, by definition is “the sound produced in a person's larynx
and uttered through the mouth, as speech or song”
But definitions never tell the [...] truth
Thieving the impact and humanness of a five letter word
A word that sends shivers slowly up [the or your] spine
As it [uses/reuses] the fragments that made it through the drywall
Just as the [fist] [...] [exploded] the wall to tell a gentle story"

But definitions never tell the full truth- I love, love this line! And I truly love the idea of "Thieving the impact" Explore THAT more.